- Realness In Me -

Obsessive, Compulsive, hell nah just the strive to,
succeed -
Aiming high not finshing till the end dont care if it,
takes me a lil longer or if i bleed -
Pumping the fusions through my system sweating it,
all out getting my high a natural hit -
Maken sure i give it my best so no critics fuck about,
so no lies are created no unjustifiable doubt -
It gives me power puts me on my pedastol,
i can do wat eva the powers in me loosen my kool,
taken it all out on you -
One bad look provokes me give me two evil eyes,
a punch of death i get in a zone the plesent dies,
and the hates takes a rise -
Theres no time to figure a pattern or have a plan,
before you know it your out and im waving ma hands -
Murderous by nature Masked in my fame ,
represting this crew but dont forget the name -
DiMeOnd
Tripple the mystery with a hint of bitch,
mix it - spike it wid Xtasy you got the gist -
I dont believe in broken hearts a true player ,
wid no manner and bad ghetto grammer -
Im a fighter a lover the perfect equation to the,
realness in me -

this was good.. ..

"Obsessive, Compulsive, hell nah just the strive to,
succeed -
Aiming high not finshing till the end dont care if it,
takes me a lil longer or if i bleed -"

nice opener, came out with a good tone.. ..

"Maken sure i give it my best so no critics fuck about,
so no lies are created no unjustifiable doubt -"

but after this part the flow got off track a lil.. ..although its hard to judge flow threw text because everyone has their own.. ..in my opinion it trailed off a lil from there

"Theres no time to figure a pattern or have a plan,
before you know it your out and im waving ma hands -
Murderous by nature Masked in my fame ,
represting this crew but dont forget the name -
DiMeOnd"

when you got here, the flow picked back up and (lyrically as well) stayed on point all tha way to tha end.. ..my favorite part as well, keep doin ya thang ma


¤GhOzT¤

Thanx, Much appreciated!

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I already Holla'd in Open Mic...Nice Piece...

this piece was tight. about tyme u started writin again. good shyt. keep postin. 1luv peace

umm..Aight, I gotta question about M&M..Is it supposed to be MASK MURDEROUS? Cuz to me, that doesnt make no sense..MASK MURDERERS or MASKED AND MURDEROUS maybe..But MASK MURDEROUS doesnt make sense..unless its masked and murderous....i dont know..someone explain that to me, cuz it always bothers me..

Anyway Dime..I thought this was an aight piece..Lots of room for elevation tho..No similies, wordplay, or multi's..just a bunch of statements with end rhyming words..and ya prolly gonna say "im just doin me.." but that the type of content i look for in a piece like this..not just the message itself..but this was aight..nothing i havent seen before..
stay up.
peace.

Thanx Gurl ...
It was a quick freetype nutin special ...

But i always got room fo` elevation no doubt,
Appreciate ur words of wisdom ...

~1~

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good
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better than most of myne.

i was feelin this and it may of been more up 4 the open mic, but i loved how ya fliped your style. i was feelin this more and anything ya written that i can quickly think of. id rewrite ove half of this tellin ya how i was feelin the metaphors ndwordplay in this but im mad lazy, but this was dope. stay up.

more of an open mic piece dime...but its all good i guess (?!?!?!)..

..had a good flow..a strong meaning....went off at times...but seeing as you changed from your usual style to this..i guess its all good...

...stay strong - keep the 'murderous beast' within under control... - ...respect..

sup dime..it's me..i ain't been on in a while and still won't be for like another month,,,

but i like ya new style better...u keep improvin.,...

and u always doubted urself...but ur gettin really really good now,,,,
jus keep at it....and you'll be on top...

much respect...sorry for keepin it short...
peep my work for da P.T.T....(poetic tourny)
I dropped..in there for da second round...

ne wayz..
.wUn.