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01-31-05, 07:48 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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just something i wrote just now.quick..lol
Born to unlearn and deal with imagination, and the many mistakes and misfortunes, I have made and will make, tough to break, Too arrogant in what i think i know, too blind to see or feel what i dont, Loss of balance, i tend to fall, I'm brought back up, then left to crawl, this cycle continues again and again, until the knowledge seeps out from within, the wind takes us as dust forms from tombs of sin, i will leave with a smile, and the strength of the sea, we were all born with it, but are too blind to see..........
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01-31-05, 09:54 PM
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The Ups and Downs of Life
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IP: D666 F54C
Too arrogant in what i think i know,
too blind to see or feel what i dont, this shit was dope... short- but very well written. I liked it alot- the way you finished was a great way to cap it off... 111111.
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02-09-05, 04:15 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
thanks for the peep....your buggley
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02-27-05, 02:20 AM
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IP: 93C0 D1DD
Alright This Was A Decent Piece I Didn't Like The Opener But I Did Like The Closer, I Found That Dope, You Had Mainly Description In Here Which Is Good In This Case Of Scriptures...Your Good And All But Try And Use More Complex Vocabulary If You Know What I Mean, And Fix Up Your Structure It'll Help Well....9/10 |
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03-07-05, 06:30 PM
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IP: 1DEB 308A
I think her structure was just fine, and the message she impressed was definitely moving. Nice one.
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03-08-05, 06:34 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: C348 5CFF
this was a okay poem..well im sure its good..its just that wasn't really able to understand it.. sorry...
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03-08-05, 08:49 PM
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IP: CF4E 8780
i fancy'd this alot it was simple .. but held emotion and honesty... nice drop.. n o yea i liked the visuals
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