when u say shit like"ya saywahat ever ya want i was borde .."..that makes me think that you really didnt take tha time out ta ur best in it...

So!

1.
--all i need is one mic in my hand a gun in tha other
this may be my last chance ta say what i got ta say to all you muthafucka's
(this line u started with is coolo,cuz it leads inta sumthan more in depth...but you still couldve used sum multi's.)

2.
--i try ta not look back at all tha hater'ed agianst me but i get caught up in it like a sucker red handed... ......there's nothin different between you an me never got along with our mother's, never knew are own brother nothins gonna change B" BUT THERE'S NO NEED TA SUFFER LIKE THA REST.. ..................in this shit you can be free .................an get yourself up outta that mess
(This really didnt have no structure but tha story was deep,sorta confused it felt like you were reaching ta ur family,still thou nice but no structure.)

3.
--................cuz
eventually one day we all die, my lyrics speak's for themself
you can tell i speak tha truth , there's no need ta lie
when pains all you've felt but shit when.....
tha beef is deep,....... an i know im goin ta hell for tha shit i did
(1nce again no structure but had a poetic feel ta it...you mustve been threw sum serious shit....but no depth ta describe what u trying ta paint)

4.
--but aint gonna stop me where i am now not well im razein my kid an
it hurts so bad,, an it makes a father so mad
of those things he did...... oh its so sad but i cant wait to see you
it doesnt make sence to me that we didnt get to say our goodbye's
you knew i'd do anything for you.... its sad to look in to your eyes
all i want to be is a good dad but there's something your mother didnt realize
i hope you'll still remmembre me after all this time bein away
i was to scared to call you but you were always
when will tha pain ever stop
i'll never make tha same mistakes
movein with a change of pace ,
my life lives in hip-hop...

mabey its tha last words you said....
ya those things that keep repeatin over in my head
now that we walked our own seperate ways
we can except tha way it is .......an be friends
we grew up together as kids an that i'll never forget......
im not gonna stop something i started with out a little respect
cuz when it comes ta comein up with nothin your expected ta forget it
(sorrta threw me off a little but i like tha line"it doesnt make sence to me that we didnt get to say our goodbye's
you knew i'd do anything for you.... its sad to look in to your eyes"
that was nice but tha hip hop line really made me think...WHATDAFUCK!?!
is this shit..really sent me threw a loop..still confused..)

overall-
this will never be a hip hop qoutable or a unsigned hype filler...but..you had me reading ta find what exactly you went threw..I found lost fam...pain with no real background story..but at the end hip hop saved you and ypu were bored so!!!! i say this gets a 2.0001 cuz you spent tha time ta type this shit you called a empty minds song...OOOOOOOkay!!


NEXT!