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01-26-05, 12:39 AM | #1 | |||||||
10:23 till i'm 86
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pimpin....
IP: 3EC9 2F38
pimpin....
the game aint as hard as this game i been playin two girls on the brain, dont know which ones stayin dont like either, so im thinkin bout goin by looks or keep both, see if they'll stay on the hook they like the perfect picture but neither needs me just thinkin of this shit...shows that pimpin aint easy met one girl a year ago, the other only a week time is of the essence, but both of 'em love to freak so i figure i feed their urge with out leavin 'em clowned i know girls got feelings, but theres enough for me to go around both of 'em love talkin, both love takin up my time when i all love is pussy, and writin these here rhymes ...not to mention that round ball sport these bitches be full court pressin, im goin at half court im on tv with only ten points... im thinkin what the fuck i should be back to twenty, even with my bad luck(knee injury) im thinkin are these bitches just a waste of time im might have to pass up a dime, so i can pass up a dime what you think? what would you do? what would you pick? ....cuz all im left with, is question about this here pimp shit
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01-26-05, 01:17 AM | #2 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: AA11 D51C
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nice drop, good rhymes. a few nice multi's in it.rhymes fall of towards the end, structure is ok. but could do with some evening of bars. topic is a bit played. keep dropping. return the feed http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=172967 |
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01-28-05, 07:13 AM | #3 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 227E 171E
i see what you mean as fasr as strectching the bars this is my first ill be back for more
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01-28-05, 10:29 AM | #4 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: 28AD 5545
yea i see what they mean, u could use a lil more words in each line vocab not a problem, but u got talent, dont stop homie 7/10
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01-28-05, 11:19 AM | #5 | |||||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 0825 899A
yea like they said u could use a few more words in some lines, other than dat ur vocab was hott, good wordplay overall, structure threw me off a bit, but its all good....keep it up....6/10
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02-14-05, 09:29 PM | #6 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 227E 171E
yeah this shit real clear in thought
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