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Old 03-05-05, 01:56 PM   #1
L. Veracity
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Fluid Moon Diss

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since she doesn't respond to call-outs, I guess I gotta sling a bit of mud at her face to get her to look my way...here's a quick few bars for her non-singer non-rapper ass...BLAH!...

http://www.rideinconline.com/jamroom/bands/151/


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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=180206
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Quote:
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LV - real talk as usual..dope shit
you're like the best story teller over a beat

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my whole album is inspired by you LV.
thats how i got this classic album.

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Old 03-05-05, 02:36 PM   #2
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ignore 7 he's bitchy right now... this was a solid diss obviously... the beat was hot lol @ the "superwoman shit" ha ha.. ya flow was str8 and you were laid back but your message came through, again solid diss. no flaws from what i'm seeing.. stay up..
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Old 03-05-05, 02:58 PM   #3
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Typing as I listen: Your audio levels are WAY too low. that single syl rhymescheme is about 10 years old. The flow was the same on every line - I know Curt ain't teach you that. Lyrics were okay - but typical. Who's dissed Fluid and said something different? they all sound the same right about now, no different fomr IDH's and LF's tracks as far as the punches. All in all, not an impactful diss track. Something liek this would roll off of a real battler's back with ease.
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Old 03-05-05, 03:32 PM   #4
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You should have changed your flow so your track didn't sound boring and redundandt. You're not just saying something, you're also entertaining and by using the same flow on all the lines, as you go on you'll defeat half your purpose when you rap. Not jsut that, but varying flow (and rhymescheme) flexes your lyrical muscle. For dudes who don't just rap as some shit on the net, they'll have a greater appreciation of your work. PRovided you give a shit about entertaining, etc.
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Old 03-05-05, 04:09 PM   #5
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im feelin that beat whats that sample from and who did it????????????????................................ ............delivery is ok, not the greatest but your on point. oh its the back to future sample or some shit right?...........your punches arent that great..........niether are your disses, it's not bad but far from great.......it needs some more work to me, just my two cents though, i like that sample that, and it wasn't really your voice throwing it off, more of that you didn't say any lines that would make somebody say "damn" or "rewind that" it was kind of boring. not tryin to hate cause you rode the beat good, and I liked the beat

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Old 03-09-05, 09:00 AM   #6
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UPin' this for s'more replies...
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LV - real talk as usual..dope shit
you're like the best story teller over a beat

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my whole album is inspired by you LV.
thats how i got this classic album.
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Old 03-09-05, 10:09 AM   #7
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Damn
you killin it.....................
flow is dope, disses were nice, an you got a GANGSTA feel ta your lyrics an your vocals, shit was bangin shorty, i'm from the south an i'ma tell you they dont come much gangsta than this little chick right here, propps n dope stuff
Keep em comin
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