damn shaynea...that was most definetly a piece of pure emotions...

...it just seemed to drift effortlessly from one line to another....(or maybe thats just the mood i'm in right now)...but either way...really depicted the pure essence of the feelings and what not very well...



....and the ending...


your a shining star boy im not gonna be th eone to stop you from glowing......
and as this distance gros so much farther..and times for you get so much harder.....remember you can call upon me......
for love fate hope or destiney.....
empathy...


was well put...esepcially how you used just one word in the end...very few can do that to good effect...but you did....


...respect shay...keep yo head up and stay strong (but you always do, so you dont need me to tell ya that)....and as always...'the door is always open'...blah!..yeah thats a bit cliche...but its all good...respect...

like i said at the other site, ill always be there for you shaynea and that wont change. I promise you that. This was def. ill and had a lot of emotion
thx for the shout out even though this was kind of a sad emotion
1. much luv
-Slow-

P.S. the doctor is in

This was a good venting poem ShaYneA ...
You covered the whole topic ... help us understand
what you were writtin about, it wasnt lost or off track!
Flowed well ...

Respect & Props
O~N~E

Aww Hazy Baby..
I really really really REALLY loved this piece..It said so much so simply..Just seemed like you were pouring ya heart out and it just happened to flow..

>dont get me wrong i like dat gurl.....she took our straight n steady n made it twist n twirl.....

Damn good.

>Slow n steady rins the race...with you seems we set our own pace
two years of boredom talk...seems t obe earsed like day old chalk

Similies n wordplay made this verse what it was too..

>kinda thought we had a good bond going.....if that was tru how comes its no longer showing...
your a shining star boy im not gonna be th eone to stop you from glowing......

such a sad note, but so good, at that.

Lovin this piece hazy..
Aint nuffin else to say.
S'all luv from me, gyrl..keep ya head on straight..
muah.

Some hott shit::

"tried to help you through ya gurl that lying hoe...
tried to give you my hand when you were falling but either you didnt care or you didnt kno......"

^^ liked that, felt it right off tha bat.. ..

"these past few days i look for your name and its simply gone..
Slow n steady rins the race...with you seems we set our own pace
two years of boredom talk...seems t obe earsed like day old chalk
the board is black without you in my threads.."

^^ all emotion here, shows what ya feelin nah mean.. ..good shit.. ..

"so many times i thought n wondered if i lived closer would i be ya gurl?then realized that freinds is our main title...nurse hazy to the rescue..."

^^ liked this as well.. ..

"your a shining star boy im not gonna be th eone to stop you from glowing......
and as this distance gros so much farther..and times for you get so much harder.....remember you can call upon me......
for love fate hope or destiney.....
empathy..."

^^ my favorite part, tha closin lines did it for me.. ..nice poem ma, keep writin


¤TwOs¤