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2 | 28.57% |
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5 | 71.43% |
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02-16-05, 03:35 PM
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Limited Edition vs Indeph
IP: 0825 899A
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15-25 Lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting I got the drop and check-in time set to Long. Just incase something happens,but we both not the type to drop last minute right? G'luck Topic=Soon To Be Reality Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 02-19-05 at 03:35 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
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02-16-05, 03:37 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
Indeph has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-16-05 03:37 PM.
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02-16-05, 05:52 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
Limited Edition has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-16-05 05:52 PM.
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02-18-05, 03:44 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
...I Know It's Coming Down To This... ...It's Just A Matter Of Time... I sit back, sigh...Impatiently waiting for you to arrive... ...The roads are bad...I pray for your safety during the drive The house is silent...Kyle is sleeping in his room.... ...The minutes tick away slowly...You will be here soon But will this bring my doom? You and Kyle have a past... ...But things you've said recently...buckle my knees, I collapse You still have feelings for Kyle...I can see it in your face... ...I feel like I'm second to him...I feel like I'm "Just in case" You arrive, you smile...I kiss you, and the you hug me... ...Then Kyle wakes up...and thats when you put him above me The way you laugh around him...you love him, I am crushed... ...Another reason for me to kill myself, oh, thank you very much I know you are going to leave me for him...it hurts so deeply.... ...Just do it...don't tell me that you love me, don't say that you need me Because then it will hurt worse...and I know that's an actuality... ...I know it's coming...I know it is, so fulfill the soon to be reality... |
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02-18-05, 05:39 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
Topic:"Soon to Be truth" Every moment the sacred word has been spoken..(love) by someone,hopin for someone to say it back,so plenty take no risks.. to channel a story back from the past panels of life.. A freshman woman,who wanted a Junior man that she liked.. As a junior,"the new freshman girls give it up quick" they suck dick,they say there hoes,never to love them.. but its okay to speak...let em think what they think... Said "I love you baby" everytime she was even to leave.. so peice by peice,there relationship is reachin they peak.. but to him,she aint nothin,but some for fuckin still.. but the girl is stuck on him,gave her heart and her trust to him.. so she let's him fuck her then,or make love is the term she used.. but afterwards she heard from dudes,that he was plannin the breakup.. she was crying,sayin damnit she was sick of the damage her gave her.. 3 months wasted...but its Ironic all of of sudden,he wants to save it.. she thinkin he playin,she hates him...she couldn't play dumb.. He was startin to love her,but she figured it's made up.. so her tears wrinse the mascare and disfigure her make up... which left her lookin a mess,didn't even kiss em goodbye so he dissed her and left,but the tears was drippin inside.. after some time past,the girl left,but the dude haven't moved.. so that was the conclusion of two...he said he loved her in th beggining... pretendin...who knew that it was soon to be true..
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02-18-05, 08:08 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
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02-18-05, 11:12 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
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02-19-05, 02:44 AM
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IP: 044D 3F70
Voted For: Limited Edition
ok this is a topical not a poem battle indepths shit is poetry not rap it dont rhyme most of it flow is way way off which hurts it as well imagery is pretty decnent but some shit just slacked and wasnt descriptive enough for me here vocab was good but the non rhyming and no flow really hurt you indepth and you need to be more descriptive its like you jump around too much sun 4/10 limited edition good very good descrition of shit here i could see the story flow and struture good rhymed nicely also good vocab and really nice imagery got you this sun good flow also helped 7/10
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02-19-05, 09:53 AM
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02-19-05, 04:15 PM
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IP: 03A1 A28A
Uppin' for some votes...favors will be returned...
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02-19-05, 08:26 PM
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Bangs like bikini attol
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IP: 80C5 FF8A
Voted For: Indeph
Look this is really close.. And I mean like I couldnt make up my mind for a while.. You both had the same type of story, but I think that Indepth took it to the next level. LE-- Your story was good, but there was nothing to describe the situation they were in. It was all just vague emotions like you were writing to someone who already knows whats going on. Indepth described the situation well and painted a picture of what was going on. One thing though for indepth, I noticed you only went to 22 lines. You should of looked at ending the peice with a moral lesson or something that people can learn after reading your verse. But good work anyway.. Peace. |
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02-19-05, 08:27 PM
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Bangs like bikini attol
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IP: 80C5 FF8A
Indepth I also hate your bar structure..
Maybe for audio, but with text its kinda annoying to pick up flow when you write like that.. |
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02-20-05, 12:19 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
Voted For: Limited Edition
L.E yo you surprised me the flow was very good the stucture was also very good but you lacked emotion in some parts you did have lots but just not as much as Deph did but you had a good imagery and vocab very good part the only thing you came weak on was emotion pretty much and a bit imagery but not bad its decent, no hate Indeph: whoa man you surprised me your style is killer the imagery and emotion you have is just unbeleiveable the vocab was decent at most parts the picture you made was very good the story you told was very different something i couldnt come up with cuz i try and write stuff that relates to me but this must have been relating to you some how i guess.. Opener: LE closer: Indeph imagery: Indeph vocab: tie stucture: tie flow: LE (sense he rhymed) Emotion: Indeph VoteL Indeph INDEPH RTF HERE http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=177669 Vote switched |
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02-20-05, 12:21 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
ooops sry bout that i wrote it in the wrong box ill go change it for ya's
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02-27-05, 06:32 PM
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IP: 1FDE B95C
Voted For: Indeph
Limited Edition your structure was good.. flow was on target.. you didnt have very much internal rhyming at all.. i liked some of the imagery in your verse, but to me, it was like, it lacked a story line.. some of the stuff just seemed kind of random.. which ended up taking away some of the potential imagery as well as emotion.. because at times i didnt know where you were going with your peice.. if you would have provided more details and gone more indepth with what you were saying, your verse would have been mad good.. Indeph structure is good.. flow is on target.. at first it was hard as hell for me to catch on your to rhyme scheme.. i had to read it twice to get it.. you had some internal rhyming.. your imagery was pretty dope.. you put out a good storyline that i could easily follow, therefore allowing me to interpret it in my mind and imagine what you were saying.. your emotion came out pretty strongly as well.. Overall both of you had a good structure and a good flow.. Indeph had more internal rhyming.. but what really took it for Indeph was the fact his storyline was easier to understand.. with me being able to follow his storyline better i was able to get more imagery and emotion from his verse.. with that being said.. im going to give this to Indeph for the better overall verse.. VOTE - INDEPH Please hit up the battle in my sig.. |
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