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hmm first whole song i actually did by myself lol...usually i just do half songs or whateva but maybe because the beat is short lol...

the twista -kill us all instrumental.
could be better which is why its just a sample.. words will be clearer next time recorded......and well....here it is...


www.rideinconline.com/jamroom/bands/165

I personally don't liek this beat.

You're maxing the recording level of your set-up and it manifests as "clipping" which sounds absolutely ear-piercing. Turn down the recording vol of your mic, or speak quieter into it. You're on the reverb WAY too much. It should be far more slight. Put a soc on the mic because it pops pretty frequently.

The rhymescheme was nice. The flow was a bit off tempo in some places (I can cite the lines if you want) by like one or two syls which pushed it over and under. Seems to have been corrected in the second verse, but the quality is still bad and borderline annoying. I liked the hook, real nice scheme to it. I feel if you trimmed those lines in the first verse a syl or two and adress the quality issues - you'll have what you were aiming for. 1

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True enough...i think basically....me personally..im just going to have to go to a studio and record rather than do home shit because im not good with editing and setting the mic different levels n shit u know lol.and shit gets tiring for me but ..thank u for feedback!.

^^damn, don't give up so easily. It's all things you can do yourself and they're all discussed in the link to "audio 101" in my sig. If you got any questios or anything I can help with, lemme know.

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i love the twista version of dis and the beat is il...and im glad u didnt try n spit as quick cos it would've fucked it all up...lyrically this shit is ill...in terms of the words u rhyming and the multis its ill..i could hearerything u sayin...but it sounds too loud n shit- like doomsday said, peep his thread or audio assistance it aint that hard to do the simple shit in cool edit girl.....the hook is coo...shit could be nice - just needs better mixing and the rest of the song lol...fav retuned.1

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yes this mos def need better mixing.. (i just woke up) but uhm, the hook was catchy very catchy i as feeling it, the end kinda seem like it ran out cuz half the chorus came thru but uhm i was feeling ya verse but it kinda sounded mechanical.. like the rhyme scheme sound almost exactly the same for each line except when u go towards the end of your verse and i was feeling that a whole lot (versatility in lines).. switch it up a lil' dun let us predict how ur scheme is and be right.. u kno who this is!!!!!!!!! stay up, ma.. 1

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