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tried committing rape and got caught on tape
quick jumped up and ran through a fire escape cops swarming, stopped and gave me a warning got followed by the tricks dodging the hollow tips one of the pigs trip, the rest all go down and slip gotta get a grip and i dont wanna get my ass whipped so let me adjust this font as i run through a restaraunt just spilt someone's crab croussant jesus what ya want!? gunz fired,turned around hit the ground jumped up & ran like fuck this fat bitch panicked ran through the doorway, nearly got stuck got out the back nearly getting hit by a moving truck more shots fire, i duck got back up and ran through mud got shot, now my legs leaking blood but i'm not bout ta give up my cars all the way at the car lot so i run to the bus stop didnt get ta look at the clock the bus came round the block got low while we move too slow and had him put it 2 the flo' been quiet for a while the pigs musta lost me from a half a mile AH FUCK someone yelled 911 and ta push dial while i'm in denile not knowin where ta go i quickly jump out of the moving window sprained my wrist, cut open my fist, and now its startin ta mist i'm startin ta get pissed they fired more shotz and just missed ran through a Stop-The-Violence rally and went through an alley shit!!..it was a dead end, im trapped turned around & got CAPPED |
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uppin..........
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New to RV
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was a good drop there man.
Was likin the vocab and good rhymes. Nice structure and flow all the way thru it. Good use of topic that made a good read, nice ending too. "so let me adjust this font as i run through a restaraunt just spilt someone's crab croussant jesus what ya want!?" -This was a really good bar, that stuck out. There was more good but this was baddd |
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Good imagery but i think there should be more into the introduction....the story was good... I had good imagery from it at it kept me interested which is nice..
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yo thanx for the feed i'm still uppin ya'll
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uppin on this shit too
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i'm muthafuckin uppin
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uppin............
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god damn it this shit need feed
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~Real Rookie Of The Year~
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it was nice Hood keep working on structure nice vocab nice wordplay it was hot liked the imagination. 8/10
btw repay the favor links in sig damn shit is startin to get slept on these days. |
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