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2 | 28.57% |
| ~Lady Fiya~ |
  
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5 | 71.43% |
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12-24-04, 08:06 PM
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Anxiety vs ~Lady Fiya~
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20-40 Lines Crew Votes ALLOWED No Recycling No Biting No B/s blah u know the rules.. TOPIC= Lost Souls hopefully my computer won't act crackish again, good luck anxiety drop whenever u get online........ and check in whenever, stay up.. sowwi for the delay and all.. Minimum posts to vote: 400 Check in by: 12-27-04 at 08:06 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
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12-24-04, 08:07 PM
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~Lady Fiya~ has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-24-04 08:07 PM.
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12-24-04, 08:27 PM
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The Wake I hear the echoes from voices of the melancholy moan over my still body Discolored from recent autopsy, agony days ago, the next I’ll be rotting I stand beside my husband as he stretches his arm to caress my casket Already a “has been”, he drops 2 distinct roses, the deep hole grasps it I whisper in his ear, he quickly turns around and walks right through me I have to get used to this feeling, my beloved not hearing words I breathe Cemetery Nights After the pastor phrased his “Amen”, my new bed has been this grave First few lonely nights are without warm welcome, climate is always rain Pouring down, slicing me then hit’s the cold soil and worn tombstones Only 1 day every year will I see my loved one, this is cannot be my home I’m surrounded by the empty space, yet my new neighbors have departed to go visit their old residence, a foggy environment isn’t where their heart is and I sit here year after year.. Pretending not to be disturbed I plan to leave I wanted to be free, my physical was no longer in charge of outer parts of me Return Home I glided a mile and a quarter through the streets ’til I reached my sweet home Noticing an old blue Chevy in the driveway, my husband must have loaned The tulips, he must have pulled them up, our lawn now surrounded by daisies I lean towards the screen door, it still had the tear in it, the wooden door fading unfamiliar voices I hear, I open the door as it screeched a little girl looked at me dropped her doll near the fireplace, a thin woman came down the stairs quickly I moved aside as she closed the door back, and shivered picking up the child Telling her it’s time to go to bed, I lost focused when the warm air was chilled she grabbed the child going to the stairs, 2 strangers I follow to the upper floor Up the steps, still creaking the way I remembered, there I opened the left door My bedroom was not as I had left it, the bed was replaced with a desk and chair The nightstand had a tall glass of water, a key chain, a comb with strands of hair Attached, the lamp was dim and flickered once I got near, radio went outta tune I wanted it off, in disbelief this isn’t my room, I can’t take sharp stinged perfume so ignorin my closet, i head towards the bathroom on my right the air is clearer My blue towels were replaced with striped ones, I glanced in this long mirror I wanted to tear up, I have not seen the one I loved nor found where I belong The search was over my reflection was enough, the vacant space is my home Non-Conclusion I have no where else to go, the possibilities are slim to none as it was before Everything that was mine is someone else’s, I made my way to the main door I glare behind, forgetting one place I thought would always be my household My memory is the last storage for where my physical could no longer control But that too, is soon to vanish, I felt so empty, lonely & completely banished This realm I can’t to handle, but my Heavenly father won’t waive my challenge
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12-24-04, 10:11 PM
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anxiety has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-24-04 10:11 PM.
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12-24-04, 10:14 PM
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[CENTER]Grew up in a good home, middle class suburban... Maken like 200 grand a year cause his dad's a surgeon... Joins the football team, cause he wants to fit in... Sometimes he would be ready to kill if his team didnt win... Grades dropped... So him and his dad yeah they faught... Sometimes it would be days at a time till they stopped... Depression kicked in, now he was startin medication... His new found girl was now his soul dedication... But when they started to go through rough times... He would take his forearm, cry and cut lines... He got busted at school, when he went there drunk... And got expelled when they found a QP in his trunk... His dad beat em, he walked away with a black eye... But he didnt want no one to know, who he'd been attacked by... Couldnt handle it anymore and moved to his mom's in Yuma... And he would soon realize that Yuma can ruin ya... His mom wasnt a great influence, as a matter of fact... She bought him alcohol and ciggarets every time he asked... Actually smoked weed with him too, he was only a teen... Too young to see his mom taken a hit of the green... School became a priority, to everyone but him... Chance at any future at all starting to look quite grim... Got mixed up with the wrong crowd, a good chance for death... Started doin real drugs, snorting coke and doin meth... Pay like 30 bucks to get a O of mexican brick weed... But then your wastin precious time while your tryna pick seeds... Got caught high, now he got a 2 year probation... But since he doesnt care, he's still fuckin blazin... Met Ryan, twenty seven and doesnt have a life at all... Now any chance he had at success just hit the wall... Drops out of school, not like he ever really went... Now his mom is asking him to help her pay the rent... He cant, he wants to quit drugs, he says that he's had it... But after like a minute he knows he cant kick the habit... So almost daily its the same scene, him smokin his meth... Pipe up to his mouth, inhale and start holdin his breath... Cant get out of Yuma, its like a maze with no exit... And trying to wipes you out, escape is so hectic... Now his whole life feels like he's walking on hot coals... Just add one more to the toll, of this planets lost souls...[/CENTER] |
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12-24-04, 10:31 PM
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nice drop anxiety, i was feeling this a whole lot......... and nice topic, u picked..
good luck, stay up, fam.. 
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12-24-04, 10:38 PM
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Word... Nice verse...
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12-25-04, 01:19 AM
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The Epitome Of Greatness
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Voted For: anxiety
Aiight.. Anxiety: Dope verse through and through.. your imagery was basically flawless i seen no mistakes at all in your verse imagery-wise.. Vocab was also pretty good, could have been better but then again everyone's vocab could be better... flow was on point for most of the verse... you consistently stayed on topic.. and i liked the sequence of events... good wordplay and depth dope piece fave lines: He cant, he wants to quit drugs, he says that he's had it... But after like a minute he knows he cant kick the habit... So almost daily its the same scene, him smokin his meth... Pipe up to his mouth, inhale and start holdin his breath... just sickness evolved^^ overall : 9/10 lady~fiya: aiight.. your verse was also pretty dope... imagery definately better than anxietys but he got you in flow, wordplay, and consistency... your verse was alot harder to follow which means either its real complex or not written as well as it could have been and i think it's a mixture of the two.. some of the lines were stretched too much and you could have shortened the lines with unnecessary words. basically you had a good verse and alot more than i expected from you but it didnt stand up to anx's verse fave lines : I stand beside my husband as he stretches his arm to caress my casket Already a “has been”, he drops 2 distinct roses, the deep hole grasps it that was probably the best wordplay in this battle and good flow but it was only one dope bar of wordplay and flow the rest was average overall : 8/10 vote: anxiety return the favor... link in sig
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12-26-04, 11:01 AM
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God is a Fable.
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Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~
Anxiety... your verse was good... your flow was on point... your structure was good... your emotion was there but i wasnt feeling it that much.... imagery was strong and i really liked it,.... you stayed on topic for the most part and didnt really drift off at all... nice verse Lady... Your verese was also good,... your stanzas was really on point and none drifted from the topic.... your emotion was strong in this and your imagery was amazing... very nice piece... i give this to you |
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12-26-04, 11:10 AM
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why is this battle getting slept on.....?! goodness, uppin........... this some hot shit right here......... uppin fa both..
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12-26-04, 11:20 AM
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Voted For: ~Lady Fiya~
oh my god i didnt know you could do topical visionary: Ladyi fiya. this shit right here was crazy Structure: lady fiya..its not even a question DAMN this peace was nice. i didnt evne have to read the whole thing to determin who won. its Quite obvious lady fiya took this
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12-26-04, 11:25 AM
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I Smacc Booty Emcee's
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hoes hoes hoes. ill explain more becuz i didnt have time
Lady FIya. i could feel your concept. more. it hit me more. especially for your first Topical. this was on fire. good ending. i was feelin this whole thing. the structure was good aswell. It was readable. and i enjoyed readin it. shit was fiya. we gotta battle sometime.. Anxiety: blah ur shit was dope too. i liked ur concept aswell but u know there can only be 1 winner. urs was jus a lil bit below hers...she merked u in structure though. but uve elevated in topicals. ..good battle. vote: lady fiya
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12-26-04, 07:10 PM
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Lmao at me getting merked in structure... I mean.. I agree... But my shit flows perfect, so who cares?
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12-27-04, 02:35 AM
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Voted For: anxiety
ok lady fiya good drop good creativity also but you basically jumped right into the story and that kinda hurt you you flow was off badly structure was madd streched visuale was very good but the story just aint come that good it was basic in a sense and not discriptive enough not saying it wasnt good but anixety had such a strong verse it completly overshadowed me reading yours. anixety fucking dope im voting you topical head of the month for this all day dope flow and structure the story was fucking spectacular its as if you started with a match and built up to a forest fire the visuale was crazy your words were like a mental movie here the ender was dope started off dope you basically just told a better story here and aganist most anybody else lady fiya wouldve won but your verse was just too good.
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12-27-04, 10:57 PM
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Damn Emp... Thanks for the vote.. Upping...
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