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04-21-05, 01:43 PM
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Im your Idols Idol.
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Twistz n Turns(song of no sense)lol...must read
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The invisible killa, spilla, manilla, illa gorilla, spillin ya thrilla, spoilin ya dinner inner, qualities of a beast obese teeth, dese strays leev's beef in the streets, where it lays for a feast each week, is an oppurtunity for dese streets to kill enemies wit a leaf bleach, or geese streak, a man who loves ham and damn kabaam kabloof spoof spam spark ya tooth, japan ya man, n plan to throw hands off roofs jus make werds rhyme is da plan my man, banning spam, Rapverse planna man, hammer bangs, werds, birds flip verb, fly herb, jerk for a second reppin the weapon steppin directions is messin blessin catchin sketchin, ya head up throw ya bread up inbet a slug in ya head wut?, back to confuse u wit a red cut, there feel betta, no wutz da letta , redder chedda ahead da game lame its a shame to blame canada had a bunch of hammers in da trunk, till i punk'd a bunck of punks..... hahaha leev feed
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 .The Council. Im from jersey killin early i aint used to da big homes,
But ma 'watch' got more 'rocks' den da 'house' of da 'flinstones', ::.Battles.::
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04-21-05, 04:18 PM
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IP:
Ah,... you really forced your mutlies, in that first two bars
Your structure was off, you feeling and emotions were okay, but could have been alot better.. i feel that you could have took alittle more time and used alittle more effort into this drop ..maybe made it alittle longer , next time try to match up your barz, elevate on your wordplay and vocab , use alittle more imagery , and you'll be str8 .. keep it up and LEAVE A LINK! or this will be closed
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