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04-08-05, 11:21 PM
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so if it is. and if it makes you sad. listen it will be ok . i'll give you my hand we'll start talking again. eventually things will turn around stop and begin lets think . pre-write the emotion script it to pure perfection, lets get it right lets do this its the last thing before the sun takes back our last cold night understand it for love, make sure you get a grip on the situation that I'm in your grudge, i never made that promise. forgive and forget , just give in no one talks about it , out of fear that it would rip things apart, your scared my greatest fear is whispered in your ear as you lay there, contemplating please think of us when there is nothing left but to panic, remember this i tend to think of it often . but nothing like what happened lets me forget now do me something,a favor all i ask, mend the hearts that were broken hold the letters i sent. if you get the chance, read one, it will explain things everything i wish i would have said. all the things we never discussed the places where we never should have been but the mistakes followed leaving this with a honest question. why is does it feel like i was less then?
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04-14-05, 02:34 PM
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this was actually pretty good the imagery here was nice the vocab as well topic has been used 100000000000000000000 times but still good you need to be more descriptive when you do things like this though take more time to desribe where what and why your doing things it will help your poem to shine more other then that this was nice drop.
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04-15-05, 12:56 PM
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cool. i liked this one. wish it was longer, and that u elaborated a lil more on your relationship with the other person. I assume you are talking to your ex girl, after a bad break up. nice vocab but your descriptions were vague. i like the fact that it seems like a personal theme in that its something that happened to you or something u went through. but i wanna be able to feel your emotion as you do. this was still nice. keep doing ya thing
please return the favor and feed on my piece in my sig, thank you
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