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04-14-05, 09:05 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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Dabatos vs Diman
IP: F8F5 C3DE
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6 - 40 lines max No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic: Autobiography 3-0 = KO Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 04-14-05 at 09:35 PM Must drop verse in 3320 minutes after check in. |
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04-14-05, 09:06 PM
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IP: 5867 FD83
diman has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-14-05 09:06 PM.
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04-14-05, 09:06 PM
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
Dabatos has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-14-05 09:06 PM.
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04-17-05, 02:43 AM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
It would be a lie, if I said that I always wanted no fame.. It would be a lie, if I said, that my life always had no shame.. It would be a lie, if I said, that I’ve lived through the dope game.. But I don't ever want to go down in history with no name…. It would be a lie if I said that I did have the worst life.. But still tell me why that my life never seemed to work right.. Almost everyday, a boy like me being forced to face struggles… For when I reached the high point of my life, I always seemed to stumble.. Where in my life the only help is the Lord who is my life’s muscle.. He’s been there for me when my world fell and turned to rumbles.. Before in my life, It’s been like a pyramid of hope n love.. No dope and drugs, its just your beloved folks and hugs.. I hate it when these people always think that they better then you.. Acting like they the top of the top, and have nothing better to do.. At times I just want to say shyt like, “ Did I ever command you?” Command you to do things that even I knew that you cant do?? No I haven’t, but these people just never seem to understand.. They we all the same, black, brown yellow livin in this wonderland.. Its like, just because im Filipino, these people think they above me.. They think I don’t know what family is, think I don’t know what love means.. They say I have no chance at all, no chance in rap entertainment.. They even think im so stupid, stupidity I can’t explain it? Yea I'm the first to come out with skill from my kin but im no gangster, |pause| and nah, im not another copy of jin Welll I didn’t want to finish.. Im out.. Too tired lol
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04-17-05, 03:22 AM
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you dont know me
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IP: 5867 FD83
AutoBiography: Famless Tree true story, seventeen & vibe magazine, these are a few of my favorite things. im young & jaded, like conan obrian with jenna jameson dreams. praying my genes will multiply, places outside the pen. i’ve lived in prejudice since ten, forever been apartheid sin. parents never cared for marriage, loved they're heavenly hearts. & they loved me in return, until death did them part. my family was in essence the trusted & I guess divine. they all passed onto heaven & like Tim LaHaye, im left behind. to my brother, id say look over ya shoulder...duck them tomas. someday Ill return the favor & leave that clique in a coma. oh & mothers aroma...smelt like roses sprayed with chanel. she was so soulful, a comic even though she hated chapelle. before her last breathe, ma told me to pray if I ever need a left. to hold my head high above drama, in lou of cheating death. my oldest brother was fluent.....in the industry of music. youd see his name frequent, like 60's civil rights movements. we jugglin freedom for those we lovin, for example my cousin... ...got 10-15 for harborin a fugitive, that nigga was her husband. see paps was a dreamer, its said he had that puffy demeanor. rocked his father’s dog tags & a jesus piece, like a believer. i currently live in spain, life hasn’t changed...it’s the same. i wait patient for equality, but the worlds like 50...im game. feelin trite bout my kin & all, like lean rhymes im pivotal. i don’t need a family replacement, just some one dependable. g-unit pendents & enyce jeans, these were a few of my favorite things. i blame a higher hate & today i anticpate...which funeral the future brings. enjoy & good luck Dabatos.
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04-17-05, 12:13 PM
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you dont know me
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IP: 5867 FD83
aight, somebody really needs to vote.
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04-17-05, 01:26 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
yeah I know.. shyt.. i lost
 shoulda tried this time......
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04-17-05, 01:34 PM
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IP: CF4E 8780
Voted For: diman
nice nice battle yall ok diman -wow i am super impressed by this .. this was offff the hook. i feel like i know you now.. awesome ok your drop had alot of really good vocab.. ok amazing just wow...ok overall you took this one you expressed yourself more and the emotion flowed out of this one like a hole in a dam ... damn the metaphors everything thing in it you have some real talent. you speak alot of truth in your drop mad respect dabatos - also an awesome drop but it just wasnt as hard hitting(in a message/vocab) sense . you had your vocab yes but it didnt play off as well as dimans did you did have the emotion and honesty in it but i thought that you could have talked more about yourself like what you been doing stuff like that but still overall this has to be one of my favorite battles i've seen yet overall i'll go with diman for just holding it down and just making my mouth drop with the honesty and emotion .. nice work to both 38198
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04-17-05, 01:40 PM
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i'm still tripping over dimans verse that shit was just insane the opener ... with the conan o'brien line and jenna wow i was feeling that
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04-17-05, 01:55 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
Damn.. like i said.. i shoulda tried
.. lol o well.. nice job man.. thanx for votes.. favors will be returned
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04-17-05, 03:07 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5145 2418
Voted For: diman
I think Diman had more imagination and more knowledge in this one. I was feeling the verse. When I started reading it, I sunk into the character, and related to it. I think this was a flawless drop. Dabatos-Nice verse, but I don't think you hit the topic good enough. Your verse seemed exactly what I thought it would be like when I read what the topic was. I just wasn't feeling it. No hate. I think you should work on your overall flow and learning how to stick with the topic. Overall-I gave this one to Diman because I felt he came with more imagination and consistency in this one. He started off good and stayed that way from start to finish and that's what made his verse good. |
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04-17-05, 03:11 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
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how does he have more knowledge?? its about our lives?
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04-17-05, 03:14 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5145 2418
Vocab and Wordings and such. I felt he came more experienced in that category. Sorry for the misunderstanding. I hope this clairified it up for you?
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04-17-05, 03:23 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: FE11 64E0
Voted For: diman
Let me break this down... diman: the strongest aspect of your piece was the emotion without a doubt and also the way you portrayed such emotional events, very creative in my opinion. I like strong emotion but sometimes it's too much you know, others would dwell in self-pity or focus on bad things but you reminisced the good memories as well. You found an excellent balance in your use of vocabulary, kept it easy to understand without it being basic. Flow was dope as well as structure, some multi's here and there. Made me think about some stuff here and there, like how you made a lot of links for instance "a comic even though she hated chapelle." It gives the piece something special I think. Some of my favo lines are the following: praying my genes will multiply, places outside the pen. i’ve lived in prejudice since ten, forever been apartheid sin. parents never cared for marriage, loved they're heavenly hearts. & they loved me in return, until death did them part. Also the second part of that last sentece ("today i anticpate...which funeral the future brings") because it sums it all up in fact. Dabatos: I also enjoyed reading your verse because it's very different which is quite logical since it's an autobiography. Like how you used a sort of introduction, especially the "But I don't ever want to go down in history with no name" because I think that's something many of us can relate to. Your emotion was good as well even though I got the feeling you could've gone more into detail here and there. You left me questioning what struggles exactly you went through and I don't get why you started talking about God there but didn't continue or use this later on. I like the last part best because it's clearly about one important aspect of your life, one struggle (people acting like they're better and such, racism, prejudices...). But I feel your emotion could've been a whole lot better, no hate...Structure, vocab and flow were all nice though. Favo lines are these: It would be a lie, if I said that I always wanted no fame.. It would be a lie, if I said, that my life always had no shame.. It would be a lie, if I said, that I’ve lived through the dope game.. But I don't ever want to go down in history with no name In the end, my vote goes to diman for the stronger emotion. Dabatos, no hate man...I liked your verse as well but diman's was more indepth in my opinion. Bank account Dab: XPETBK-27926
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04-17-05, 03:24 PM
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Odi et Amo
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IP: FE11 64E0
Voted For: diman
Let me break this down... diman: the strongest aspect of your piece was the emotion without a doubt and also the way you portrayed such emotional events, very creative in my opinion. I like strong emotion but sometimes it's too much you know, others would dwell in self-pity or focus on bad things but you reminisced the good memories as well. You found an excellent balance in your use of vocabulary, kept it easy to understand without it being basic. Flow was dope as well as structure, some multi's here and there. Made me think about some stuff here and there, like how you made a lot of links for instance "a comic even though she hated chapelle." It gives the piece something special I think. Some of my favo lines are the following: praying my genes will multiply, places outside the pen. i’ve lived in prejudice since ten, forever been apartheid sin. parents never cared for marriage, loved they're heavenly hearts. & they loved me in return, until death did them part. Also the second part of that last sentece ("today i anticpate...which funeral the future brings") because it sums it all up in fact. Dabatos: I also enjoyed reading your verse because it's very different which is quite logical since it's an autobiography. Like how you used a sort of introduction, especially the "But I don't ever want to go down in history with no name" because I think that's something many of us can relate to. Your emotion was good as well even though I got the feeling you could've gone more into detail here and there. You left me questioning what struggles exactly you went through and I don't get why you started talking about God there but didn't continue or use this later on. I like the last part best because it's clearly about one important aspect of your life, one struggle (people acting like they're better and such, racism, prejudices...). But I feel your emotion could've been a whole lot better, no hate...Structure, vocab and flow were all nice though. Favo lines are these: It would be a lie, if I said that I always wanted no fame.. It would be a lie, if I said, that my life always had no shame.. It would be a lie, if I said, that I’ve lived through the dope game.. But I don't ever want to go down in history with no name In the end, my vote goes to diman for the stronger emotion. Dabatos, no hate man...I liked your verse as well but diman's was more indepth in my opinion. Bank account Dab: XPETBK-27926
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