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10-21-05, 06:25 AM | #1 | |||||
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My Fight With The Champ..
IP: A7AC EBEC
As I walk to the ring I'm not nervous...in fact I feel a little cocky Cuz I feel like God himself could try and challenge me and couldn't stop me This match has been in the makings for months, not many people gave me a chance I step through the ropes and show off my hand and foot speed with a dance I hear a cheer from the crowd, I see the champ walking in I ignore his entry music and continue shadowboxing The introductions and staredown are a blur, I'm just ready to get started This man has ridiculed me in the media, I'm bout to show him where my heart is The first round I come out strong, got my head moving and I'm sticking the jab He throws his first punch, hits me in the jaw...I take it and laugh I'm unstoppable, there's no way I am losing this fight The crowd is slowly starting to support me, TONIGHT is MY NIGHT As each round goes it's back and forth, the champs not ready to give up his reign I'm losing stamina but I'm still determined to bring the pain Then in a burst of energy I give him a 1-2 that knocks him back A short flurry later he's in the corner dazed, I have him trapped My cornermen start yelling "You can do it, you're gonna win" I took a little time to look at the tv camera and grin That right there was my big mistake, the beginning of the end Cuz right then the champ hit me with an uppercut to the chin A right then a left and I found myself down on the canvas Looking up at the ref I said "Help, I've been ambushed" "It was 7 or 8 of them with baseball bats, looking crazy demented" But then I realized what really happened once I came to my senses I made it up before the 10 count but my knees were wobbly and weak After the final bell, "good fight" were the only words I could speak I sat down on the stool so worn out I could hardly budge Knowing that my fate now lay in the hands of each judge The announcer speaks and tells the crowd that the first judge gave the fight to me My eyes are swelling shut making it hard to see but I'm starting to get happy The second judge burst my bubble he gave the fight to the champ Dammit he's ruining everything I wish I had Aladdin's genie lamp So I could wish for victory but magic isn't the name of the game The third judges' decision is said, and the winner is Bizzo, and this was my claim to fame
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10-21-05, 09:25 PM | #2 | ||||||
This is my first post!
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IP: A181 D033
ok this was a good piece. the imagery was definitely there although if you upped your vocab you coulda created a greater level of emotion. flow was ok though. overall this was a decent piece.
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10-21-05, 11:44 PM | #3 | ||||
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Drop two links or this will be closed
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