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Drama Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-11-05 11:25 AM.

mizz fyre has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-11-05 02:30 PM.

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One chair in a room darkened, absence of illumination
The place chosen to consume her self made medication
Creating a painful sensation, tho easing her greatest fears
Erasing tears, secrets she told evidently fell on deaf ears……

At the beginning

Sunshine blessed days, she graced lives with a simple smile
Loved by many, irrespective that her moods were so versatile
Hostile one minute and the next she was acting so contented
Reinvented people’s views, so found she was misrepresented

Creating a compartment in her mind, containing her feelings
Invaded by secrets who could she talk to about her dealings?
Turning to her family, but her deepest woes were discarded
Her heart barred, like expensive jewels, securely guarded

Mental breakdown, so unstable came the doctors prediction
Childhood gone, times when candy was her biggest addiction
Now facing troubles alone, a spacious world she’s unknown
Her life once in flight but its clear that this bird has now flown

now........

One bed centered in a room darkened, its there a body lies
A note hidden in the corner illustrating her final goodbyes
Sunlight from the window presents such a peaceful scene
Up in the skies no more deaf ears, finally she’s a queen……..

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checkin the pollz, should be a close battle....good drop chick.

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Bumping this battle up, is gonna be close indeed...strong drop...

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strong drop from you to dq and thanx T

uppin ya'll

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...Upping this shizzle to get some fucking votes...

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Voted For: Drama Queen

I think DQ took this one. I was feeling her verse wayy more. I think her verse was a lil more interesting, and understandable, and wayy more creative. I like how you stuck to the topic, and never fell off during yo whole drop. Your vocab was nice, and your imagination was also better in my opinion. Nice drop.

Mizz Fyre-you had a nice drop, but I wasn't feelin tha whole thing. No doubt you came out nice, but I think you drifted off topic a lil near the middle to the end. But, you had somewhat good imagination, but I didn't see too much creativitie in yo verse that made me want to think twice about my vote. Your verse was just nice to me. Nothing big!

Overall-My vote goes to DQ because she came with more consistency. She came out strong and really hit the topic well, and I felt she stayed that way throught the whole verse. That's why she got my vote. and her imagination was just a lil stronger, and her verse was more intelligent.




plz RTF on this battle link


http://community.rapverse.com/showb...47&page=3&pp=15


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^Thanks for fully explained vote, much appreciated

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Uppity Uppity Up Up Up!

Bumping this all the way to the top!

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Voted For: mizz fyre


I liked the concpet you choose to use for your drop....you had a strong message behind your lyrics, this was a very unexpected route u took on this topic but u worked it nice..which I liked...u had strong vocab...good flow but u lacked any multies, your strucutre was solid though..dats really only weak spot of ya verse.

Missfyre......you had a very expected topic...u flipped the title into a story which is what i expected both yall to do...however your story was good..had nice imagery...an it developed well, had a few rough spots but overall story was told nice...ya vocab was good alil inconsistent but for most part strong....your flow was good an had a some good mutlies here & there not many but enough.

Overall: both of you had good drops...it was a very close battle..only blaring difference between the two was content...I gave it to drama becuz her content was alot stronger than mizz..other than that it was pretty much even..but great job to both.

Vote: DQ

Vote switched

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oops my bad yall i meant to vote for drama queen...y'all could have that changed..my fault

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