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Old 05-24-05, 12:29 PM   #1
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Gettin Attention Pt. 2...more skillz

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*here it is again...hopefully i can get honest feed on dis...read*

[hook]
GO 10-4!...get they attention playa
show em whats up, neva slip, keep it goin nigga
GO 10-4!...get they attention playa
show em whats up, neva slip, keep it goin nigga
-repeat 2x-

[verse 1]
my words are weapons like imma OG, critical wit bars like these
strip off ya feet then run em ova wit my new Timbos and Nike's
fuckin women pices and bust in scorpios to show em whats up
then i pull out tha jason mechete to act bad and cut up a cunt
splattin shit like a skunk, tha funk might as well ooze out ya comp
break down a fuckin bed bunk, throw it in a trunk and then stomp
on tha peddle like cords in heavy metal keepin myself focused
prize inside of my eyes like Rocky wit tha song, liftin up horse shit
forced to stip like yall was used to dis, guess rap is contagious
outta retirement like pastor mason, cant really keep my fans waitin
i'll fuckin spray up ya bus, bombs explode like volcanos errupt
prop up tha dead bodies and knock em back down wit tha snub
we got multiple gunz, so in da club we always hear "ooh" and "ahh"
drinkin enough purple potion at tha bar til i say im tha hulk and "rahh"
now in eight bars, sixteen lines, i displayed my muthafuckin skillz
so if dis dont get u niggaz and wiggaz hooked, i dont know what will

[hook]
GO 10-4!...get they attention playa
show em whats up, neva slip, keep it goin nigga
GO 10-4!...get they attention playa
show em whats up, neva slip, keep it goin nigga
-repeat 2x-

*now u may drop feed like its hot...real talk*
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Old 05-24-05, 12:35 PM   #2
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Old 05-24-05, 04:26 PM   #3
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I Didnt Really Like This...
In My Eyes You Didnt Say Anything At All...
Compared To A Real Rapper You're Like A 50 Cent...

Cuz You Just Made A Track Throwing Blind Threats...
So In The End, No Is Afraid Cuz It Wasnt Aimed At Anyone...
And No One Can Fallow Cuz The Reader Is Left Behind...
I Dunno, Really Didnt Like It...

But On The Real...
A Track Like That If It Were Audio Would Sell Good...
Im Sure It Would Be Cetchy On Wax, But Not Something I Like...

Overall I'd Give It A: 5.4/10
Sorry Kid, Gotta Have More Content...
Tryn Do A Deep Topic Next Times, Cuz I Did Like Your Flow...
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Old 05-24-05, 04:35 PM   #4
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the hook was ok could of been better but ya flow was hot and ya bars was ok...

my words are weapons like imma OG, critical wit bars like these
strip off ya feet then run em ova wit my new Timbos and Nike's
fuckin women pices and bust in scorpios to show em whats up
then i pull out tha jason mechete to act bad and cut up a cunt
haha had me laughing not bad no word-play but decent...

ya ending was good and everything was nice to read word but u aint really say shit or should i say much?? i mean flow is decent just no vocab and no punches or anything stood out but keep droping them like its hot word up u will only get better mad props..... 6.5
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Old 05-24-05, 10:03 PM   #5
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thanx yall...dis jus sumthin, nuthin on a specific topic 4real...uppin...real talk
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Old 05-25-05, 03:06 PM   #6
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Hey, Please Return The Favor And Check Out My Latest O.M...

"My Little Insecurities" ft. OSB
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=192345

Thanks Alot Mayn...
And If You Do Some Shit On A Topic PM Me...
Im Interested To See How You Do On It...
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Old 05-25-05, 03:17 PM   #7
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Ahhh this could have been alot better , ive seen alot better from you ..
Structure was possibly the best thing you had in your drop...
Emotions were there...but they werent really good, imagery..
was decent ..it could have been alot better..probably would have been better
if you made it alittle longer... Flow was there but it wasnt really flowing to good..
Overall keep it up ive seen you do alot better..just keep it up....
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Old 05-26-05, 10:19 AM   #8
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iight, thanx fam...and i got u att...uppin
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