Try use quotes clever like on notes or letters I like
Strong talk while on a hike or long walk never gripe
Need cash in a rush so I can mash and crush these bills
Being in debt is a threat, grab a cab or taxi and run to the hills
To hide the mail box fail me not bills up in there everywhere
itch extreme to flow but to pitch means to throw so who dare
toss rocks at my lost plots it’ll cost a lot if struck up side the head
so I got a club which is a heavy stick, thug in a Chevy slick and red
My harmony scripts are like army ship their large can’t dodge
Them

some nice flow to this some decent multi usage however always room for improvement as i felt the multis were inconsitant so work on that and it will greatly help the flow
Content wise it was decent, some simple similes, no real complexity
Probably ur best line

My harmony scripts are like army ship their large can’t dodge
Them

Flow was on point an its a str8 simile

Stay up and keep doing you man

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