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06-04-05, 09:45 AM
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WhoAreYou?
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Gimme Some Feedback On This!!!!!!!!!
IP: A181 D033
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=193767
Yo I, Pound on you fake pro's blow fo blow, yo Even though when i roll im seein no shows, yo Therefo' i couldn't see you steppin on my toe bro, Yo man i'll make a nigga run like Flo-Jo, Yo i only just started, nigga dis a promo, Flowin straight, while you try to bend like a homo, Yo i never have to resort to a low blow, When i flow, i leave you needin band aids like Bono, Yo da reasonin behind you being here's a mystery, Whole load of big talk's all there appears to be, Nigga you ain't nuthin on me, ain't up for debating, Only time you got a grip iz when you masturbating, Yo kid, i castrate yo rhymes on the daily, Leavin your flows timid like Beetle Baily......... |
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06-04-05, 10:29 AM
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IP: 1CC8 1F5F
Hahaha, nice drop kid....im feelin this.....specially the word play and the structure was tight....frsh 2 def.....also the jokes were preetyy fly.....RTF 4 my OM, link in sig
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06-04-05, 12:54 PM
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IP: A181 D033
Yo uppin for feedback.......................................... ........................................
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06-04-05, 07:35 PM
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WhoAreYou?
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IP: A181 D033
Uppin for feedback people.holla at me................................................ .....
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06-05-05, 10:02 AM
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IP: 0825 899A
Eh, I Wasnt Really Feeling It...
Some Aiight Wordplay And Such... The Ending Rhymes Pretty Much Sucked Though... The Way You Would Break The Flow To End With "Yo"... That Doesnt Really Do It For Me... People Will See That And Think You Lack Creativity... Overall The Piece Wasnt That Bad... But I Just Hated The Way You Rhymed At Points... Just Work On Being More Creative... And Its Ok To Rhyme The Same Word Twice... But It Sounds Bad Unless Its The Same Word Used Differently... Stay Up And Keep Writing Kid... .One. |
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