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Old 06-13-05, 08:57 AM   #1
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Gripless reigns.

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Flames lick my heart.
corrupted theorys.
Plague my mind.
But what am I to do?
when hope thins blind.
Mankind, limbs are set.
fragile views released.
Into hordes of opposing.
Streets cracked, rampaged.
spirit tarnished, eliminated.
No foundation left for the brave.
Falling, falling in a midst of peril.
flickering of despair passes.
into a void of content.
When there seems to be.
nothing.
Nothing, without power.
Requiring belief, to see.
sudden jolts of glee.
Spark at the inside of hope.
Taming the unruly.
& grasping at thick reigns.
Hostility vanquished.
By the pressings of me.
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Old 06-13-05, 01:02 PM   #2
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ha ha ha ha. this is wack in every aspect. im sorry, but this needs so much work. omg, this has to be the choppiest type read ive ever read. im sorry this is very stupid. this needs alot of review. sorry i cant leave feed becuase this was shit.
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Old 06-13-05, 10:44 PM   #3
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well his feed was a little harsh lmao.. but i can see that u do need alot of work.. i can see that u somewhat know how to use vocab... u just need to put more emotion into ur lines.. and u can be a decent poet...
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