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The gun wasnt to far from his own home
Infact for a start - it was just unda old clothes
Bein 9 in a fun mind - always has trouble in the young eyes
But the wrong line - squeaky and sayin "just one time"

So he goes around playin cops and robbers
Showin his friends - like the glocks a dollar
Wonder where the fuck is his mother and father?
They dont bother - to check there son while he wanders

Now playin Indians and Cowboys - giving stick ups
Scaring elders with such a foul toy sayin - "Bitch, what?!"
Never pulling the trigger - his mouth was the shot noise
Probably cuz he figured the gun was just a hot toy

So he goes to his room - aiming his self in the mirror
The things kids do - we need rules - to keep it clearer
Curiosity leades him to aim the gun at him self
To have a peep in the hole - where the bullets are held

Eye to Eye with the gun - and his finger slips, "Click"
The safety lock is gone - and now his life is.....
So he cocks it - "What will happen if i pull this"...-drops it
And now the blood drips - now a sons hit - now the clock ticks...

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Nice...worn't call that poetry but Nice!!!
keep droppin son, nice stroy tellin,
i know of ppl who actually died doing that stupid ass shit!!!

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Nice rhyme scheme, worked well..
Although this did have imagery..
Emotion was lacking quite a bit..
The whole story made sense..
But the topic is so played that its hard to think of this as an original piece..

Keep dropping..