Hiding behind this facade can’t stop
Want to get behind something that won’t drop.
Need stability, hunger for an ability
to do something, anything at all.
I cry at night, cursing my life, wishing I could
be another person, and have a chance in this world.
I’ll just be another statistic on the news,
another scrape, another bruise.
I call out to God to have mercy on me, but I think
he’s testing me.
Trying to make the best of me, but it hurts, oh it hurts
the transition inside.
I don’t know anything any more I feel like a lamb
led to the slaugter door.
Waiting for the world to swallow me whole, spit me
out and take its toll.
Never gonna find love, I always said, I wish sometimes
I forgot this past.
I wish sometimes it never had last.
This was my past, ahead to the future, I’m still as dull
now as I used ta.
Don’t try to save me, don’t try to tame me, just try to
give me a shoulder and I’ll be alright.
Too many people have taken advantage
Hurt and going on landin.
Take this pain, and scatter it I said to Him one night
he did, like he scattered day from night.
This is my recollection, my want of perfection, my
deepest hour of depression.

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3 nails + 1 cross = 4given
No matter how good you are there's always someone better.
I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be.

this was good, emotion was high which gave it a unique style, liked it a lot babe

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thanks babe, now i got u, ain't none of this gonna show up.

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Sig Provided by: Christianite

3 nails + 1 cross = 4given
No matter how good you are there's always someone better.
I'm not the status quo stereotype you want me to be.

The part i highlighted,i didn't think fit well in this poem,it just seemed like you tried to shove words in. The rest was very good. Try to structure your pieces better, because you have the vocabulary, but sometimes carrying it out and portraying your thoughts down is tougher then just thinking them. Overall good poem, keep it up.1

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