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Old 06-22-05, 08:19 PM   #1
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Ten Years Gone

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Then as it was, then again it will be
Though the course may change sometimes
Rivers always reach the sea

Like stars of fortune
Each has separate rays
On the wings of maybe
Down in birds of prey
Kind of makes me feel sometimes
I didn't have to grow
But as the eagle leaves the nest
He got so far to go

Changes fill my time
Baby, that's all right with me
In the midst I think of you
And how it used to be

Did you ever really need somebody
And really need 'em bad
Did you ever really want somebody
The best love you ever had
Do you ever remember me, baby
Did it feel so good
'Cause it was just the first time
And you knew you would

Turn the eyes and I sparkle
Senses growing keen
Tasting love along the way
See your feathers preen
Kind of make you feel sometimes
Didn't hard to grow
We are eagles of one nest
The nest is in our souls

Vixen in my dreams with great surprise to me
Never thought I'd see your face the way it used to be
Oh darlin', oh darlin'
I'm never gonna leave you, I'm never gonna leave you
Ten years gone, holdin' on... ten years gone



This is a poem about your first love, and going back to that first love ten years later, just to find its too late.


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Old 06-22-05, 10:11 PM   #2
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leave atleast two replies to someone elses poems.
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Old 06-23-05, 02:54 PM   #3
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I'll reply to one of the 15 you have on the 1st page.
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Old 06-24-05, 12:05 AM   #4
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LMMFAO^ listen katharsis, let me do my job in my forum..
anyway..i thought this was a great poem all around, beautiful metaphors, the way you delivered the message across, wow, great vocabulary, emotion and expression of feelings..great job on this poem, keep dropping.
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Old 06-24-05, 01:35 AM   #5
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ok fluid, but i only said dat so he can leave feed on someone elses instead of just letting it sit. but i will step aside. im sorry. (leaves this thread with a frown)
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Old 06-24-05, 06:07 AM   #6
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Then as it was, then again it will be
Though the course may change sometimes
Rivers always reach the sea

We are eagles of one nest
The nest is in our souls

^A couple of the most beautiful lines in my opinion, I enjoyed reading this poem. You portrayed such a strong emotion, pure and serene, all of that worded so nicely! Imagery was there a bit with the metaphors but the best aspect was the emotion of course!
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Old 06-28-05, 10:14 AM   #7
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lol @ the featured pieces not being viewed anymore.

thanks feed.
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