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06-22-05, 08:19 PM | #1 | |||||
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Ten Years Gone
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Then as it was, then again it will be Though the course may change sometimes Rivers always reach the sea Like stars of fortune Each has separate rays On the wings of maybe Down in birds of prey Kind of makes me feel sometimes I didn't have to grow But as the eagle leaves the nest He got so far to go Changes fill my time Baby, that's all right with me In the midst I think of you And how it used to be Did you ever really need somebody And really need 'em bad Did you ever really want somebody The best love you ever had Do you ever remember me, baby Did it feel so good 'Cause it was just the first time And you knew you would Turn the eyes and I sparkle Senses growing keen Tasting love along the way See your feathers preen Kind of make you feel sometimes Didn't hard to grow We are eagles of one nest The nest is in our souls Vixen in my dreams with great surprise to me Never thought I'd see your face the way it used to be Oh darlin', oh darlin' I'm never gonna leave you, I'm never gonna leave you Ten years gone, holdin' on... ten years gone This is a poem about your first love, and going back to that first love ten years later, just to find its too late. FEATURED~Nice Job.1-fluid
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06-22-05, 10:11 PM | #2 | |||
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leave atleast two replies to someone elses poems.
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06-23-05, 02:54 PM | #3 | |||||
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I'll reply to one of the 15 you have on the 1st page.
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06-24-05, 12:05 AM | #4 | |||||
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LMMFAO^ listen katharsis, let me do my job in my forum..
anyway..i thought this was a great poem all around, beautiful metaphors, the way you delivered the message across, wow, great vocabulary, emotion and expression of feelings..great job on this poem, keep dropping.
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06-24-05, 01:35 AM | #5 | |||
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ok fluid, but i only said dat so he can leave feed on someone elses instead of just letting it sit. but i will step aside. im sorry. (leaves this thread with a frown)
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06-24-05, 06:07 AM | #6 | ||||
Odi et Amo
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Then as it was, then again it will be
Though the course may change sometimes Rivers always reach the sea We are eagles of one nest The nest is in our souls ^A couple of the most beautiful lines in my opinion, I enjoyed reading this poem. You portrayed such a strong emotion, pure and serene, all of that worded so nicely! Imagery was there a bit with the metaphors but the best aspect was the emotion of course!
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06-28-05, 10:14 AM | #7 | |||||
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lol @ the featured pieces not being viewed anymore.
thanks feed.
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