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12-02-05, 02:23 PM
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my alliance is with ganja
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when im gone remix ft robby mccallister
IP: 44AE F596
Have You Ever Loved Someone So much… That you’d rip out your heart…
Right out of your chest… and instead of putting back together you pull it apart… When they leave It’s hard… All this pain… the snow makes this world so cold… Like I have no home and no one to go home to… but still McCali won’t fold… Instead I’m asking Jesus to look into my heart… please save me… I’m going just a tad bit crazy… They pointin’ & laughin’ and try to deface me… Swipe my pride like credit cards and get your gain… let me die… Tried to survive but it’s like walkin’ the path with no light… Regret we try… I’ve gone to war against every kid who thought they had a fighting chance… I’ve gone to bars to get every bitch who wants a man and while we dance… I see what I’ve become… as she fades away into the smoke from the roach… And I look around… And notice I’m by myself… A Ghost… …and when I’m gone just carry on…don’t morn… rejoice…
…everytime you hear the sound of my voice… …just know that… I’m lookin’ down on you smilin’… …And I didn’t feel a thing so baby don’t feel no pain just smile back… …and when I’m gone just carry on…don’t morn… rejoice… …everytime you hear the sound of my voice… …just know that… I’m lookin’ down on you smilin’… …And I didn’t feel a thing so baby don’t feel no pain just smile back… …I look into the eyes of my little girl… the door bell rings… …finally not a police sting or a drug feind… I feel a sense of well being… …finally stability has come to me… or has it… I wonder… …I look out my window at these my gutta streets… and hear a light thunder… …somehow Ive gotta escape… get my family to a better place… …so I go back to the streets… cant let em down and let the cheddar waste… …someday ill probably be back in the pen… back wit my friends… …a moment of truth… I stop in my tracks and lose track of my ends… …I look right and see the face of a little girl cryin’… and its real as fuck… …so I walk two blocks down into the cop shop… tell the deputy im givin the dealin up… …toss a rock on the table top and kneel down on my knees… …he just stands still… and tells me to proceed… and god smiles down on me… …and when I’m gone just carry on…don’t morn… rejoice… …everytime you hear the sound of my voice… …just know that… I’m lookin’ down on you smilin’… …And I didn’t feel a thing so baby don’t feel no pain just smile back… …and when I’m gone just carry on…don’t morn… rejoice… …everytime you hear the sound of my voice… …just know that… I’m lookin’ down on you smilin’… …And I didn’t feel a thing so baby don’t feel no pain just smile back… *will edit with links within 24 hrs* Young Days Bad Ways - SL.Valentino pink is me default color is robby
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12-02-05, 04:10 PM
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Coming to Kill you All
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IP: 18C7 DE99
Ok,you both need to shorten up your lines,they are waay to fucking long.bad flow in this OM,
The 1st verse,not one bar that flows.Those lines were fucking long. The 2nd verse,well..a FEW bars that flowed,but..most of that shit was stretched. So bassically,shorten up your lines. Content was ok,should have been better tho,considering that you stole another man's concept. |
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12-02-05, 09:12 PM
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Geaux Fuck Yourself
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IP: CB8D BCB7
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Noting your wack... and gave feedback about flow. God damn you are the stupidest idiot ever. I write the same on all my verses yet your the only dumbfuck to ever say shit. It isn't stretched... it's my style. Also noting I didn't know this was going up cuz I wasn't done 
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12-03-05, 02:02 AM
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Whys That?
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IP: D15A 9E3F
WTF @ natural killer giving feedback about text flow -_-
This is solid, emotion is good. Visionary from both of you is good. Vocab could of been alot better, which would of added to the visuals and emotion. But this is good. RTF on gods pain |
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