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Old 07-09-05, 03:51 AM   #1
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rate my new love poem.

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until u reached into my heart i was broke in 2 but u gave that back provoke now my heart "Beat" can finally soak cus my emotions were played with and bruised but now u put my jigsaw together cus love is for ever kept within hearts shared between anthony and Diana got this love on bullseye darts we the first ones ever to be ranked "charts" its like a 2 way relationship cus when yours ends with ty the next one starts differently I act upon you way better then before your flat out beautiful dont let anyone tell u differently kissin ya neck gently seein my baby gurl express her self intently
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Old 07-09-05, 05:35 AM   #2
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cmon ppl wat did u think about it?
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Old 07-09-05, 10:15 AM   #3
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You Have To Add Structure To Your Pieces or It Makes It Entirely To Hard To Read.

I Feel Like Your Just Talking Within Your Poems, Use From Vocabulary and Emotion Throughout Your Verses. Be Creative.

Wanna See An Example..Go Look In "UE Cypher Session" The Shit I Dropped For Your Topic.

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Old 07-10-05, 03:08 AM   #4
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yea there is structure i jus wrote it out and didnt space it.
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Old 07-10-05, 03:40 AM   #5
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yea, what R said....
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Old 07-12-05, 11:41 AM   #6
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From Now On Post Everything You Want Criticized or Analyzed In "Verbal Assualt" In "UE's Battle Grounds"

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