My brain contain the gospel, I’m an apostle with script
Can’t influence me my endurance be Christian on holy trips
So dawg pass the bible it’ll help my task as disciple
Hatred igniting but by sacred writing I preach try rifle
The words and stifle herds of sinners got stats
In the hood solid like slats of wood it’ll tilt hats
I’ve have kilt with gatts well I guess I feel guilt for that
This stuff is sweet food for a street dude dang thug is played out
Cause fun and delight to pause with gun sight strayed about
In a combat zone in your habitat and home rolling in chrome
Now on a mission of devastation with a Christian revelation
It take vision and elevation lot of precision with celebration
Need rigorous security for my religious purity Satan’s soldiers
Be weighting my shoulders, sick politics throws boulders
At god and church stuff be odd too much gas prices too high
Need a little peace in the Middle East tired of being bad guy
Try to find a house and a fine spouse to kiss and reminisce
With, designs verse from the confines of the earth dim and brisk
yell can hear a lion roar in my iron ore just a jungle twist
a surprise to my eyes soon realize a boom in the skies
oh fuck is a bird or plane naw just my words in flame that fries
Brains

liked this, u had emotion but still kept it gangsta nice job, nice structure which made it flow sick, vocab was there on point, good concept...u know what ya doin.........rtf on my o/m please

this is poetry.....................................this decent....but you juss wrote what you're against

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this was an alright piece. u had a good idea. the only thing i would tell you is to stick to the topic cause it kinda seemed like you drifted away. but other than that good flow and good use of multis.

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thi was ight....good mutlts.....good kinda bored though...make it a little more interesting next time...content was bland.
Try and word your lines better too.

not poetry rap came out with multies first no such thing in poetry as multies if a poet use it then he or she is biting a rap style

thanks for the responses for real yall

Lmao. Dude, poetry is older then rap, you little twat. like, a lot fucking older. Centuries older. Millenia older. In poetry, there is such things as multis, and there can be as many as you want. Just because people rhyme a lot in a poem doesn't mean they're 'biting a style', if it's possible to bite a style.

maddrapper, you're biting the style of having hair and wearing clothes. You're biting the style of having two legs and two arms and fingers and opposable thumbs and eyes, because those existed before you were born. Tool.

I didn't bother to read it, because it's going to be the same shit, but keep trying.

Finally gettin betta, u gettin there keep it up.

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thanks for the props on this one straight up rap with real multies

Daemon get a personality check you just wrote some straight up garbage if you didn't read the post how can you comment get that whack head of yours out the trash can


Lmao. Dude, poetry is older then rap, you little twat. like, a lot fucking older. Centuries older. Millenia older. In poetry, there is such things as multis, and there can be as many as you want. Just because people rhyme a lot in a poem doesn't mean they're 'biting a style', if it's possible to bite a style.

maddrapper, you're biting the style of having hair and wearing clothes. You're biting the style of having two legs and two arms and fingers and opposable thumbs and eyes, because those existed before you were born. Tool.

I didn't bother to read it, because it's going to be the same shit, but keep trying.

Is there anyone on this site that likes maddrapper? lol

nope ...... lol

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I can comment on when you said poetry bites from rap styles, because that's one of the gayest things you've ever said. I'm going to sig that.

in poetry there a rule known as 'poetic freedom' it gives the writer the ability to create his/her own words, own rhyme schemes, or totally kill puncuations and all proper english, so there is no rule that says poetry cant contain multiple rhymes...

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