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07-14-05, 01:17 PM
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Inevitable Return
IP: 3270 6348
Like my scrotum here it is in a nutshell: One thousand nine hundred and eighty-six plus two, That's the year I got here when my dear mother's water blew, Not really realizing the prize that's been begot to her, The bona fide lo-fi high-octane philosopher, Genius with a penis, the few the proud the me, I liked me so much I had to buy the company, Soul for sale sold to Satan for a hell of a lotta luck, I'm hard to come by like a straight guy working at Starbucks, Thank the thinkers that think they thunk the thoughts that theorized, Idolized or despised bet I'm gettin' recognized, Mount Rushmore it? No ignore it can't rock with no big head, Half of the people want me half of the people want me dead, I am the Angel of Def with my rhymes against humanity, Teeter-tottering between brilliance and insanity.. The one part the Fuehrer the one part the Pope, It's the inevitable return of the Great White Dope.. Put down for missed notes put up with misquotes, Don't want the whole story? Should have bought the Cliff Notes, Like Fingerpainting 101 give me no credit for having class, One thumb on the pulse of the nation one thumb in your girlfriend's ass, Written on written off scoff callin' me a joke, I don't think that I'm a sell-out but I do "Enjoy Coke!", I struck gold but never took it for granite that's how I planned it so can it, Around the planet fans demand it and you'll never understand it, When I die no lie plan on mass pandemonium, They may display my brain in a pickle jar at the Smithsonian, The one part the Fuehrer the one part the Pope, It's the inevitable return of the Great White Dope,
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07-14-05, 01:29 PM
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IP: 8191 8B5F
Yo I like this, Good Piece man, I really enjoyed reading it, Flow was right on Point, Structure was good, as well as your Rhyme Scheme, i would like to see this Audio... Overall i would say.. 8/10
Return the Fav http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=199939
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07-14-05, 05:29 PM
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IP: 0522 9CD1
This piece was good dawg. The flow was there and the nice combination of words made it even better. The alliteration was nice and the metaphors were ok. The only thing bad was probably the structure. when i saw the huge words and crazy scrtucture, i almost didn't read it. Nice rhyme scheme and funny topic...keep it up and return the favor to the Open Mics in my sig.
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07-15-05, 01:26 PM
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IP: 4659 FA9A
ban me please....................
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Spilled Inc. -I write my dreams on a foggy window and watch them slowly fade away.-
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07-15-05, 01:49 PM
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IP: 0AE0 3B1A
Drop a link or this will be closed
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