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Old 07-14-05, 06:34 PM   #1
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Papoose keeps lines-n-rhymes sacred like old China scripts
Can see brillance in my 'mic' like North Carolina clips
I'm in and out take ur pile before ya can line ya chips
Easy to spit verus pussies cuz I can out word Vagina Lips
Like a Playboy got one on each side never a lonely day hoe
Dont need instrumentals just fall back & let the Sony play tho
My spit is legit, so I pay no attention to wut a phony say so..
Haters are in pain yellin in the background like a track wit Tony Yayo
If u creep wit the snitches u'll be the peeps wit the stitches
So keep wit the wishes for any chance not to sleep wit the fishes
Flow runs steep wit the switches 4 lines have ya leap wit the twitches
Never cheap wit the riches so I always roll deep wit the bitches
Man I get high stay wit the jars-n-pipes I spit bars-n-hype
Aim so good I'll go to Mars-n-snipe so dont spit like ours-n-bite
You wont amount to much so I'll slip ya $5 to go to my car-n-wipe
If u aint from America..fuck you.. i aint feelin ya I'm in stars-n-stripes
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Old 07-14-05, 06:44 PM   #2
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First of all, i'd like to say, that last line was gay as hell since i'm hispanic. Your flow was good but it switched up at the end and took it off road. The vocab was good and the multies is basically the only thing that let it flow. The structure was good, but the who bitches rhyming thing is played out. Your first four lines were your best ones and dat's dues to your metaphors and similies. Keep it up and return the favor to the O.M.'s in my sig.
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Old 07-14-05, 11:27 PM   #3
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