MADDRAPPER AND KING SLIMM

Look I’m home freaked with my own beat unknown
On streets but have flown to the peek of this gun zone
Shooting glocks and gatts knock of hats with bullets
Stifle and strange on the rifle range at my shot group targets full it
With holes zero in and become a hero of men my friend
Legit and renowned and rattled fit for a crown after battle when I win
On microphones flow dirt make cats go berserk just rap trend
Now I wear bling dim here talking to King Slimm Amen
This bring fun and blend “so king” “what up MADD?” “go ahead
And sing to these cats using MC stats most already flow misled”
MADD My type script is like a ship it comes to dock from the block
Scarred a lot because I’m hard knock like JAY-Z I’m CRAY-ZEE hot
Go to the gym get muscular above the rim as hustler like MARY J
And CASSIDY we carry away the nasty because we hustlers like every day
Twist foes and dispose of them we hustle, got crisp flows
And a list of bozos we hustle, no fun on this block oh no
A gun in my sock we hustle, I’m bold but scold by RV cats
Want MVP stats of my own lot of them DVD rats
So MADD I’ve rapped enough make me want to slap and handcuff”
“Yeah dawg I feel you, lets reveal our crew RV wants to stand tuff

Yo man as usual ur multis were fresh kid.....but ur shit is always like 10 lines.....gutta actually have stuff worth reading..........dont kknow what to say.......good concept.....vocab up on vocab/....structure was bad....but it flowed iight.........kinda made sence this time 7/10 keep elevatin

no kinda this made good sense

dont hate on the feedback i give you man...take it and then RETURN THE FAVOR.....dont complain

th elink I've read (http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2357299)

like taz said it was ight but all in all structure was horrible, vocab needs elevation, jus work on it & hopefully u'll b'come betta if not den u need 2 stick ya day job no bullshit

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Payn think you're riding the bandwagon how can the structure be bad yet it rhyme on the end?