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08-17-05, 10:12 PM
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"Why We Write" Devin Ft Payn
IP: B157 E022
This Is Another Collab By Your Boy Devin Hittin It Up With Payn This Time Why We Write Devin - Red Payn - Blue [Hook-Devin And Payn] Hey man please explain to me why we write... its like when you first learn to ride a bike... you learn you dont stop, you might be right ... Of course, now let me tell you why we write... [Verse-Devin] I write for the kids that dont have a cent, And turn to violence to get them money, attackin wimps I just grab the pen, And tell you how i feel, People sayin you wont make, but freak it if i dont get a deal, Just here to tell you my emotions bout, How yall mc's goin to get burnt if you dont get the lotion out, And i know no fame will come from this, That alone will make most people say forget it im done with this, But i do it just for the fun of the game, Tryin to be orginal makin sure theres none with the same, ideas that i so creativly put in my rhyme, Not to be a internet thug yellin bout how im good with my nine. i never say im not good enough, to concieded, And listen to what i say its not ripleys so you better believe it. [Hook-Devin And Payn] Hey man please explain to me why we write... its like when you first learn to ride a bike... you learn you dont stop, you might be right ... Of course, now let me tell you why we write... [Verse-Payn] I write 2 express how i feel inside...so jus listen 2 me & enjoy diz ride~ i'm trapped in a world full of envy, jealoulsy, & mental strain, dat u can c in my eyez from my heart & brain is how i come...my lyrical scriptz hit harda den a fully loaded gun all my life people have constantly doubted me...it gives me plenty of motivation gotta talk bout how rapperz 2day r full of animation...& claiming thangz dat neva even happen lie about life experiences...tha only time, it'z really goin on is when dey in bed napping i neva thought i was betta den ne otha...but jus a different type of brotha i live a life dat'z real doubled sided...so it'z hard 4 me 2 escape from under~tha~coverz wit all my fam & friendz dying...writing helps me 2 ease all tha Payn no matta where i go, i can't seem 2 avoid da thunderstorms thru da rain i got a vivid imagination...& feel my words tend 2 b not given but yet taken i have lots of goals & dreamz...but tend 2 think dey r no near close of makin but i'ma keep on stompin...& no point of time do i plan on stoppin til i reach tha top of diz rap game & den make sure dat i'm neva droppin & diz is tha reason [Hook-Devin And Payn] Hey man please explain to me why we write... its like when you first learn to ride a bike... you learn you dont stop, you might be right ... Of course, now let me tell you why we write... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=203000
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08-17-05, 11:51 PM
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Better than you..
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IP: 01C3 560C
I tried reading it but the font was hurting my fine tuned laser eye's.
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Spit it from the heart, spit a thousand darts, split ya head apart…
Emcees depart, like rubin carter my hurricane left u scarred… Like a spiked bat grammatical bar, like a wonderland drug… Tumble - ing like a flagon of rum and 2 blunts, like the funk baby… |
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08-18-05, 12:17 AM
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Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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IP: 50F1 953C
this was pretty good, Devin i was really feelin your part, good flow and structure, the best part of this drop............Payn yours was ok, structure seemed a lil off to me and didn't flow as good..............overall this was a good drop, keep it up
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 i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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08-18-05, 07:46 AM
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IP: B157 E022
Thanks For The Feedback And If You Cant Read It Just Copy And Paste it Into Notebook
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08-18-05, 09:38 PM
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IP: B157 E022
Thanks For The Feed Uppin To The Top
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08-18-05, 10:12 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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another good piece by u man nice job
 liked this one too.....payn nice job only problem i really had was wit the font.....eye soring fix that lol...other than that overall 8.5/10...keep it up
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08-18-05, 11:15 PM
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IP: B157 E022
thanks alot for the feed
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08-20-05, 12:32 AM
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IP: B157 E022
Uppin i fixed the colors
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