Putting It Down

A thug mean solid like a submarine proud of my torpedoes
But in order to launch one had to beat a off a cloud of mosquitoes
Experience motion galore on the ocean floor a whale
Of a job and the fish scales are odd see a mermaid female
Underwater my ship navigated and my script dilapidated
Like rotten wood picked cotton good this crap educated
Being thug alive and mean is like to subscribe for a magazine
And this brother is yet to be on cover of JET in a dew rag green
Rapping script but as captain of ship stay fit for a crown
Make legit rounds in my vessel no life reserves for nitwit clowns
Use the process of intimidation pass on knowledge
Like the cold and bold administration of a college
Afraid of the professor “what are my grades for this semester”?
“Well MADD you flunked”, just cake in the mix the date
Were fixed to my exam that night assumed a cup of gin late
With one gulp my friend great tasting and less filling
Stress was thrilling me

MY LINK (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=205029)

Sup yeah this was alright u know, wasn't really feeling the opener I
thought your rhyming was too predictable, but as the verse went on
it got better...

I liked this bar.....
Underwater my ship navigated and my script dilapidated
Like rotten wood picked cotton good this crap educated

It flowed well at times, ok vocab,... it was alright stay up homie.

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CriTiC thanks for the props and bein ghonest for real

ehhhh..... its betta than most of ya other shit erm work on expandin a vocab n make all lines rhyme overall 6/10 definitly ya best shit but still you need to elevate n stay on point

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-UNF- easy 81/2 lines not stretched like most posts hit hard and heavy the vocab was good enough this iks not a grammar show a dang freestyle board act like you know (anyway thanks for responding)

this was some good shit right her but expand your vocab and youll be alright
7.5/10
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=205090

NaRc-UzI thanks for the props for real homey

my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2377390)

This was cool better than most of ya drops...
but yea work on yo vocab thats vital.........
and don't use words thats no on ever heard...tha type of shit
college professors use...than you juss trying to hard
but yeah ya flow was on at times
but i geuss overall i'll give this drop
a 6.5/10

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"don't assume me Im not what you're used to"

.Merkage. NOPE 81/2 BECAUSE IT IS OBVIOUS EVERYONE CAN'T MULTI-RHYME NOT AN EVERY DAY THING AROUND HERE (WELL ANYWAY THANKS FOR PEEPING)

not a bad piece, nice structure...even though for the half line lol....gave it good flow felt it good concept....ur vocab....didnt even know what a couple words meant lol dilapadated? yea lol...anyways nice drop 7/10 keep it up......and rtf on my new o/m which will be out in a couple days

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NiggaPlease THANKS FOR THE PROPS AND CRITIQUE

flow..flow was good..multis were there like always..it enhanced the flow a lot..still..i would like to see a piece from you that has one main concept..and stick to it throughout the whole thing..but ya flow was good and everything..i'd give it a 6 or 7

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