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09-12-05, 04:35 AM | #1 | |||||||
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intro: everyday we are faced with government officials doing things that they shouldnt be doing, ripping us off, going to war, and we dont need that shit, not when theres war on our own streets as it is... i need to break a few things down right now, listen
ai'yo the whole world collapses and relaxes our people faced with moral dissatisfaction interactions, aint civil no more in our communities our young race dont have no good opportunities homes start to break up n no longer make up it seems to be money n hate that has to make us others put in behind all them money makers instead of helpin the people, n helpin all the races we all have to struggle here in order to survive mentally, i get messed up in these emotional tides love, gets raplaced by crime and unforgiving made me think again bout this place that im living sit n watch as the world turns with its drug traffic and the poor struggle while the rich just sit laughin hook: life is hard when mans let the bullets spray government corruption, its just another day i want to run away how can i live for tomorrow when i struggle for today?? repeat verse 2: im just tryna live, im testing my will power lookin around the world devours it by the hour our headlines hit with, corrupts MP's, missin person gang shootings, drugs, another person murdered i cant even bare to think bout the shit that ive heard of cant make sense, and the shit just gets worse everyday, theres a war, in everyplace of the world government fucks u over, wether u man, woman, boy or girl justice aint shit, when u judged for dressin like a stereotype officials with white stripes are the ones to put ya life right its like you cant trust anybody no more gotta think b4 openin ur own front door streets have changed, goin from raps to gats and now its all bout busting and ratta-tat-tat hook: life is hard when mans let the bullets spray government corruption, its just another day i want to run away how can i live for tomorrow when i struggle for today?? repeat verse 3: kids breakin into flats taking watever they can wrecking peoples lives for the sake of a grand u cant deny, that days dont pass by when the news aint open your eye children scared to go to school, the shits shocking not stoppin- thats why we got truancy as a problem its hard to put it down to one simple reason for all the civil, when all our public are dis-beleiving that shit happened since the dawn of time back when man allowed greed to enter his mind the dispicable kind, who live better off aslong as they live good, ne1 else, cant give a toss so who can change this life that i got?? take there best shot, but ima still get my points across hook: life is hard when mans let the bullets spray government corruption, its just another day i want to run away how can i live for tomorrow when i struggle for today?? repeat |
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09-12-05, 05:05 AM | #2 | |||||||
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09-12-05, 11:04 AM | #3 | |||||||
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yoyo dawg this shit would be SO hot as an audio
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09-12-05, 03:38 PM | #4 | |||||
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You Leady You Got to make this an Audio Fams cause this Shit is Fire and Im interested to see how your flow will be.......Nice Vocab man,Nice Hook
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09-12-05, 05:08 PM | #5 | |||||||
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thanks appreciate it, i might put this in audio, if i can get a beat made to fit and re-word it properly to fit the beat better without loosing the message n what i wanna say etc then ill do just that hehe
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09-12-05, 05:23 PM | #6 | |||||
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Honest feed, ur piece was actually enjoyable... i feel ur verse was filled with good creativity and nice emotion/imagery.....i feel ur structure was a problem for me, didnt let me catch that flow out there...but im sure it would be hella hott for audio get at that homey.....overall 8/10 keep it up fam....1
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09-12-05, 08:30 PM | #7 | |||||||
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thanks fam, uppin this
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09-13-05, 03:28 AM | #8 | |||||||
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uppin for you lazy twats
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09-13-05, 12:09 PM | #9 | ||||
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First off it was kinda hard to read as the structure was for an audio verse, but still it flowed well so who gives a fuck.
You had decent imagery and emotion our headlines hit with, corrupts MP's, missin person gang shootings, drugs, another person murdered i cant even bare to think bout the shit that ive heard of cant make sense, and the shit just gets worse everyday, theres a war, in everyplace of the world government fucks u over, wether u man, woman, boy or girl RAW^^ Good shit fam.
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09-13-05, 06:44 PM | #10 | |||||||
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thanks, appreciate it... uppin this
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09-14-05, 04:22 AM | #11 | |||||||
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fucking sleepy bitches
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09-14-05, 04:28 PM | #13 | |||||||
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thanks man really appreciate it.. come on people
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09-15-05, 04:04 AM | #14 | |||||||
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uppin once again
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09-15-05, 03:12 PM | #15 | |||||||
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uppin for u little fags, ive replied to mad shit in here n no fucker can return the favour??
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