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10-07-05, 07:20 AM
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Poet's Daughter.
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Da Art of Story-Telling
IP: 62C3 7065
Da Art of Storytelling The Truman-Show! I've watched you grow, from a baby to an mature adult, protected you from fear and pain. Now look at the result. I remember when the first time you came into this world, it was a grand entrance from the heaven gates- you curled into a little small ball into this magnificent boyish creature, so many features on your body and mind same as a teacher. this was a new start of era, when everyone is watching you, above the clouds "god" is watching as days you go through. light shine's above you while the angels dancing and cheering, celebrating your entrance of life where "life" is all about ...."no rehearsing" You came home all excited about learning new things, your eye's so inspired by everything that the earth brings. You squirm when your aroused with that little cute smile, bound tightly with love and care and protection-nothing vile. when the sun falls down-arise the dark night-you start to cry, so many hearts anguish in pain inside, the emotion is so high. the parents come with sad faces with wings they put around you, crushing the plague dew- roses blooms- away the felt of being blue. Moon arises shining a bit of light around, while you sleep tonight, eye's close and your imaginary is running wild in your mind as ....everyone from the other-side says "good Night" age 15 that's when everyone witness something so tragic, damn tears from all around fall-without no rain. that’s magic. running with the ocean, and I aren’t talking about walking feet’s, this was the grave stone where your dad life was being defeated. It moved calmly-suddenly the road gets rough-sound of thunder, lightning coming from everywhere, the mind is in fear it also wonder, "will the boy survive or will he'll finally go under?" then it happened, all jokes and laughter was put aside while mother nature clapped him, "son I have to tell...." damn he went under and the tears starts fallen, tried to tell the truth and let everything come out but damn now ....he’s in pieces and been blown away like a pollen for 20 years this been going on, he hasn't got a clue, mind is lost in illusion, with clown make up, he's a fool. when that fake casket went the ground, your tears boil, took it in as a hard toll-rates went up like we just found oil. we felt so sorry for you, but for 20 years went dramatically down, you've studied the days, and you wonder "is there god now?" one death occurred throughout your whole life and you wonder, tightly bound in vines we couldn't let go you not now not forever. July 26 20010 you've made a choice, to stand up to your fears, i felted a spear went through my heart-rates went higher.. .....everyone was all eye's and ears I had to do something, it's whether you live or I die, so many questions went through my mind-hard to decide. I turn it up a notch, wind blowing harder like a hurricane, the pain in my veins raging to it's peak to my big brain. but i couldn’t. I’ve used you, I'm not your father...I’m not, feeling so down inside, I’ve lost pride...In hell i shall rot. so i let you go with a good ending of the story of you, you reached to the otherside and found the truth *opens the exit door...and says.....* "if I don't see ya...good morning.. after-noon. Evening and night to you. THE END! * I had to rush at the end* Leave feedback and OpenMics Links or Poems, audio's that you want me to crit on..peace.
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10-07-05, 12:14 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
dayum this was long, holy shit my eyes are blurry, lol im just joking, i liked it really, its not something i normally would keep reading but you kept my attention, it seemed i wanted to know what the next paragraph was going to say, the emotion was really high in this piece, i liked the way you explain the story, great job, keep it up, nice poetic piece here, take care 1
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10-07-05, 05:48 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: FCE0 27E3
Thanks..........
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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10-07-05, 11:12 PM
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Not_Indeph
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IP: 0825 899A
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