Look rap is a classic mission get enthusiastic recognition
By a loud applause it’s a proud cause to be in a position
To deliver rhymes and shiver minds like cold weather
Bold and clever with verse forever first my scroll is never
The worse flow loose like silk and produce milk like a girl’s
Breast and hurl mess on microphones that strike the world
Flow reality from locality to locality but no fatality because
I duck fights get vibrations from all this migration must pause
On my moves ands grooves not bird or fish but my words twist
Like snakes on the crawl, trash rocks like cash crops grown brisk
On a large scale and sold at garage sales for profit stuff adulterated
And cultivated like ears of corn hears the porn enough in multi elevated
Verses, thunder a coast like the undergrowth of an Earthquake slated
To hit by morning, look to survive rude is like being deprived of food
As a poverty victim economics can be robbery system causing attitude
Change try elude the strange rules of sick politics can’t swallow it
Stomach won’t digest the mess so the stress builds can’t wallow a bit

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i liked your ideas, and the message you tried to put across... i wasn't feelin your delivery too much, and there wasn't enough emotion for this kind of interpretational drop..

it was still nice though, you brought a lot of creative thoughts into it..

"To deliver rhymes and shiver minds like cold weather
Bold and clever with verse forever first my scroll is never"

keep it up man, and rtf.

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Black D.™ thanks for the props for real homey

Black D.™ THANKS FOR THE PROPS FOR REAL YO

I’m worse than a nurse attend patients daily but remain
Flagrant and scaly with doctors take pills for my brain
They make me ill and lame the spirits within make my lyrics
Thin like sliced meat nice and unique sounds soft so hear it
Want plain satisfaction, main attraction was a girl of beauty
That hurled booty my referral to cutie with the red lips my duty
To rap, if she were in the nudity make me snap couldn’t take
A nap perhaps sex all night long, visuals are here with cake
Like a fiscal year great to audit her books as my sex mate
Coo-chee lips juicier and looser than a producer ready to
Audition her kisses