DISS TO YUNG WIZ

You strange in America need a change of character your
Purpose is to hound and be a circus clown dang brain sore
Your girl has a hairpin while you have a pair of fins just
Some punk fishes, critical fate in a political state of rust
Damn shame how you can’t campaign like candidates
Just a failed nerd G, dang jailbird trustee with a plan fake
You can’t feast with wine you write deceased rhyme so wait
Call the funeral home, this bitch stats are dead lets tilt the hats
on our heads, shit not literary its an obituary and saturated fats
a bunch of calories and allergies so muh fucker sneeze please
your whack shit clutter skies like butterflies and fog leaves on trees
even with a fishing fleet you couldn’t be pissing deep in oceans
just a freak with emotion say what you want unique potions
of rhyme magic? Bitch you a blind tragic use some lotions
on your ashy hands you’re a trashy man so face these explosions
while I dynamite your mainframe, can’t rhyme right just a plain James
even with a feeling of wonder you can’t be dealing with this thunder
lightening with strike you and your dyke mom too leave both in blunder
this stuff perfect like a circuit got electricity and publicity dawg
even holding this fuse you’ll be misuse when I drop this shock
on your block you write clout but your lights going out will stop
your slop, my style soar like a wild boar bitch just a pig in a wig
having a bad hair day

my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2549427)

my link (http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=215697)

ahhhh god damn imma fucking killl youuuU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!STROBE BAN HIM FROM RAPVERSE !!!! DONT FUCKING POST THAT SHIT HERE!!! POST THAT IN THE DISS THREAD YOU FUCKING HERB AHHHHHHHH

hey btw you fucking moron, these two links are wrong, you didnt leave feed, you just posted another trashy open mics of yours in other threads, dumb fuck

upping for a response

Thsi si the best thing i have ever seen on rv. You seriously shoudl print this off and send it into aftermath, Im sure they will sign you as a ghost writer. Seriously.

You have alot of talent dude, Why you wasting it on this site. Take it to the world. Yoru the next superstart of rap. Can you please teach me how you do such creative multis?

Gladbag,your getting waaaaaay to carried away with multis.Even to the point where some of your shit doesn't make sense.I'ma do a bar-to-bar breakdown to show you what I mean.

You strange in America need a change of character your
Purpose is to hound and be a circus clown dang brain sore
^Ok,the "dang brain sore" part came outta nowhere,and i don't see what purpose it has in the bar.Also,ur wording was fucked.the 1st line,it should have been..
"You strange in America AND need a change of character CUZ your"
^that wat ya' line should have said.The way you put it sounded bad.
Your girl has a hairpin while you have a pair of fins just
Some punk fishes, critical fate in a political state of rust
^WTf is a pair of fins?..that makes no sense.Punk fishes?,that's dumb.And the critical fate/political fate multi in between made no sense neither.If anything,it was forced..seems like you were just trying to put a multi in there just for the hell of it.And that's something you can't do.
Damn shame how you can’t campaign like candidates
Just a failed nerd G, dang jailbird trustee with a plan fake
^Plan fake?,that was forced.Looks like you had trouble trying to rhyme with candidates.And also..how is it a shame that he can't campaign with candidates?I don't think Yung Wun is a politican..so wtf are you talking about?And wtf @ dang jailbird trustee?


Ok,I'm not breaking down the rest..cuz you should get the idea by now.Your making shit that makes no sense.I reccomend easing up on multis..it seems to be hurting your verse more than making it better..

And don't come at me with hate,I'm giving honest feed.

NK you wrong bro, this guy is the best ont he site. cant you see that?

Lmao...I guess I'm blind.

All Right Thanks For The Props And Critique On This One For Real Yall