I'm Sick And Tired Of Living
I Kno Death Got Be Better Than This
Sittin In Sessions Inhalin What Exits The Spliff
Counting My Blessings Because I Was Blessed With A Gift
And It Came Unwrapped
Iown Slack But My Potential Remains Untapped
Sippin Tap Water From The Faucet
Wondering When I'ma See The End Of My Hardships
Ahhh Shitt, Life Got Me Going Thru Hard Shit
Fridge Ain Been Filled Since I Moved In My Apartment
That Ain't Rockin My Boat Tho, I Got A Hard Ship
Set Sail, And I'm Good Long As Wind Don't Die Down
I'm Now Wit A Rowdy Clique, My Pals
Disturb The Peace And We Won't Die Down
Ride Down On Life's Roller Coaster Feelin My Stomach Drop
Chest Out, Spine Strong Shinin But The Stuntin Stopped
I Never Was One For Showing Off
Lifes A Movie From First Person I Stay Tuned Till The Show Is Off
I'm Runnin The Route But The Throw Is Off
Pushin Redline To The Redzone And Dead On
Yea Holmes, You Losers Should Head Home
I'm Winner When I'm Winded With Head Phones
Because I Know It's My Best When My Breath Gon
Can't Live My Life Right So I'm Dead Wrong
Head Stoned Till It Read R.I.P On That Tombstone
The Rap Game Consists Of A Few Clones
I See Ya'll Tru Colors....You Niggas Is Two Toned
I'm Too Strong
....Takin It Back, Raps Is Phat, But In Shape, AY!, I'm Too Toned
This Is Mood Music With Blue Blown::
I Get My Blues On::
In The Thrown And Those Throwing A Few Stones......

I'll post my linkz first thing in da mornin....but if u close it ill just pm 'em to ya.....i gotta get home to my son

Short piece but it was nice. Kept to the point never really strayed, the vocab seemed aight for this piece. The flow was nice and the structure was fine. My favorite line was:

Wondering When I'ma See The End Of My Hardships
Ahhh Shitt, Life Got Me Going Thru Hard Shit
Fridge Ain Been Filled Since I Moved In My Apartment
That Ain't Rockin My Boat Tho, I Got A Hard Ship

^^I thought thats was real nice. I just liked the wording and emotion in it. Overall this was an aight piece nothing really special I'd give it an 7.5/10. Stay up man. And please RTF on Runnin' the link's in my sig. Peace.

good structure
good flow
good vocab
but a bit simple but hey isnt always bad i guess
peep my new song someday ft. my home girl veronica in om
n e ways homis good drop keep postin n stay up nigga keep yo head up

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there r my linkz

Decent. If this is what you're really going through then it'll make more sense.
If not then you're just another pretender like everyone else on this site.

The piece is not bad,kinda hard to get the exact flow by reading it. I would rather hear it.

Keep it up ..

The flow was weird. It wasn't my kind of read. Not really into the whole "this is my life" but it not really being your life kind of thing.

Meh, try and write to a cooler topic my friend.