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Old 11-10-05, 11:59 PM   #1
MurDah
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This Bitch Freestyle

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i wounder why bicthes play games for like a game board
you had all my love, im guessin yous a plain-whore
i aint mean shit to you when we was together
so why would i cry my tears in a raining weather
to many ups and down seem like lifes full of bumps
many try'ed to holla, but you tossed ya-self on some chump?
bitch i'll drag you down the block by ya hair-whore
and pick at ya face with niddles, cuz ya looks i aint care-for
ya attiud change, guess females are even the man once in the army
been around alot of street war, why you think now you can harm-me?
bitch the only thing you can say that'll hurt...... is im filing for child support
and even then u'll have a hard time,
cuz me and my child is hard to seperate like deporting a u.s citicen
so keep log'in to ya blackplanet, in search for another rican
see... you make no sense even when this bitch is seek
another wanna be latin speak'in, who probley reekin
and been to jail.... cuz hes he get no ass and been window-peeking
do what you feel good, i'll do what you say hood
so when i smash ya whip like you did my heart... i hope im understood
BITCH WITH EVERYTHING CAPITOL,.........................
I KNEW THERE WAS A REASON I CAME AFTER YOU,
CUZ YOURE "V" CAME AFTER "U" ...... BITCH!!!!

last bar.... v = whip = car....... alphabet R..S...T..U..V ....... v came after u dont get the wordplay fuck it then....

yup im kinda tight at this bitch/fucking-whore/TRICK....
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Old 11-26-05, 11:57 AM   #2
rexless
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i feel alot of anger in this right here a couple of good rhymes in there and the flow was concistent couple of emotional bars that mad it a decent read if i had to rate this 8-10
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Old 12-26-05, 07:17 AM   #3
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that flows well man keep that flow up i can read it easily
good wordplay in it aswell
u must hate that chick tho..lol
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Old 01-03-06, 11:59 AM   #4
Johnny 6-feet
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Pretty dope and slick with the multi's. A clear topic which is difficult to do in a keystyle. Some witty stuff in here, the punches were cool. A little more vocab would've helped but overall this is a good piece.

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