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Old 01-03-06, 11:09 AM   #1
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lies

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I seem 2 get caught up into a load of lies
you can't denie it when I look inside your eyes
I don't understand why everyone wanna see me hurt
but with all ya shit i take ur making me go bizerk
I try my best on earth but it back fires on me
and im always 2 tired cuz I can never get no sleep
Cuz im thinking of you your lies that are digging in me
I'm tired of people not taking my life that seriously
IF you only understood from the beginning somethings wrong
I wouldn't have had 2 carry all this torment for so long
sometimes I can't stop thinking about my fucked up past
cuz it's gonna haunt me it seems like it's always gonna last
I try not to worrry because I don't wanna drive myself mad
but I got a step dad that is always making my life sad
Just don't effect me wid ur lies it's 2 much for me 2 handle
why does life seem 2 drag me down and be such a battle
Your words don't make no sense you don't want no offence
cuz I will damage you wid words that make you tense
I got alot of rage with in me and I need to let it out
I can't control my mouth it needs 2 scream and shout
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Old 01-03-06, 11:43 AM   #2
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The vocab in this bugged me, you need to aim for a sophtiscated level to draw the reader in. The topic was kind of generic as well, you should go for an original topic to stand out. Some multi's would've been good to see.

Keep elavating.
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Old 01-03-06, 01:52 PM   #3
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