I seen a...


bitch that looks like you, a kid that look like Av
guess you're fucked... in any fight that you might have...
you don't get it, stay the fuck outta my place,
ya'll wack to test on stage n' can't make it on myspace...
you got a style n' anyone around with it,
post a poll... and watch me beat ya ass down with it...
stop that talkin... like I won't whore you kids,
ya whole crews bitch... now give back the rib...
I whore... mentally n' physically, it's not a rumor
plus I don't need a moniker... to son you initially...
don't fret, Av's here... just to scratch the surface,
we're different... I wrote this here... wack on purpose...
stop frontin damn,
asked, where's the hood at..? kid thought I was talkin bout the clan...
my mic got fixed... Av's the hardest, bitch,
don't make me spit words at you... straight from a rugers lips...
my flow... damn... how can I describe it
like water got seasick and committed suicide at it...
wanna learn dopeness... you fuckin hover,
Av'll spray ya thoughts... teach you to duck n' cover...
I aint even tryin... I just willed the words bitch,
fakes are will smiths career.... gay to switch...
don't think Av won't bang the ground,
swore I shut you assholes up... the way I shut shit down...
I'm sorry you're in love with it,
my flow I mean... now do the river dance... at the bottom of it...
stop the shit talk... his name? I don't remember,
but I'm controllin his ass... like a fuckin inventor...
think about it... I'm sonnin ya crew back,
how it feel... for you to love me and me to diss ya diss track..?
no wordplay in my verse, punches aren't important,
hell I shouldn't rhyme... now mines as wack as yours is...


I don't know ya squad...
I don't give two fucks...
I don't know ya squad...
just give up...
I don't know ya squad...
I don't give two fucks...
I don't know ya squad...
just give up...

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word, short, but cool...i laughed at the water/seasick line...it was ill, haha, good shit man, guuud

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this was all right enjoyed it keep up the good work and add some multi's let me drop this here

from a sprung list you plumb pissed on this I’ll defeat you
Completely with the heat uniquely from my gun crew
This thermal mess will leave internal stress on your bowels
Now you constipated and devastated by this you need hand towel
Wipe and understand the vowels I spit, I’m lame like a hurricane
Destroy main bodies and tame parties winds twist and bite lame
You could end up in a an arena with Katrina as debris fly

most of the time I would call you a moron... today will be no different. I hope you're joking... being that I'd shit on you and your style... because it's stupid wack... and perfect for text... be a emcee... & spit something once in your life other than sperm cells.

lmfao@ other then sperm cells.

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Trust me, Im much fucking better then you.

G.M.S.

Lols Decent Man, Who Was This To? Punches Meta's Was Nice, Rhyme Scheme As Well Structure Was Good Keep It Up

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Nice diss piece, some hard punches, those personals were funny as well. The choice of topic wasn't exactly original but this was a diss piece so fuck it. Decent level of vocab and good use of multi's throughout. Not much more to say about this except that i'd like to see you tackle a more topical subject on your next piece.

Keep posting.

um... I'm gonna guess you have no clue who I am...

Hey you crummy and what’s funny about sperm cells?
Perm fell a bad hair day a sad affair sway like sleigh bells
You talk while I rhyme you don’t walk in style divine
Design flames to confine your brains rip out your spine
With twine you just a swine other words a pig online
Not educated and your slop dedicated to a flea’s mind
You small like that very tall and fat need to lose weight
Come with a pathetic drop wearing athletic socks damn fake
Feet itch so your flow crammed like toe jam a stink lamb steak
Got my cock on antilock while your girl’s panties drop all cake
Feast greedy like a peace treaty confiscate land and
Devastate man like food and shelter he’s a rude helper no plan
Like new books got a few shook my scripts and topics
Will hip hop it, live true and will give you my autograph
Or snap shot because I rap a lot and that’s my motto and craft
Proceed on blocks as my flow leads flock of rappers, feel me?