The skies grey, the moon shines right though it
unified groove soothin melodies and tunes
in tune with the atmosphere the planets bare
that same beat as my heart matchin.. the snare
passin the stares sneers and snarles of fakes
Tryin’a get in gear on the darkest interstate
I been a bad boy stompin in a big world
Lift florals in the snow yo.. my shit’s thorough
The kid boroughed, to get deep beneath the surface
Found what he couldn’t reach, than he unearthed it...
Ya heard it no stress I measure time like my money
So when I’m assed out it’s like I’ll still have plenty
Worth ain’t defined by pennies but y’all act silly
Braggin on nonexistent papes without any
Now think about that I hope Bush wrecks our shit..
Maybe all we need is to see the trade deficit
in a mess and shit... Economic Disaaster..
Put that on your pinky ring you fuckin greedy BASTARDS
It’s like the renniascance be.. plaayed out
The artist heart gets fucked like pussies and ate out
It’s just the way it is but I’ll never fade to black drop
I stack on top of piles and God tossed the last rock
with an exo-box outlook I see the wholes grandure
Movin shit with candor moon child triple cancer........

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look this was nice i enjoyed it keep up the good works but let me drop this one

I MOVE ALONG AND GROOVE STRONG// LIKE MARCHING BANDS AND SQUASHING VANS// AT RED LIGHTS JUST TO KEEP MY HEAD RIGHT// THIS TRAFFIC CAN BE GRAPHIC AT INTERSECTIONS POP RHYMES STAY ILL LIKE STOP SIGNS// BLESSING THE PREDESTRIANS ON CROSSWALKS WITH FALSE TALK//LOOK I BE ITCHING IN THE KITCHEN SO I PLAY WITH BOWLS JUST TO STAY WHOLE// WITH FRIED CHICKEN TAKE PRIDE IN LICKING// THE PLATE CLEAN BUT LEAVE SOME CRUMBS SO I'M A PSYCH BRAVE USING A MICROWAVE// FOR GRAVY AND RICE BEEN A COOK IN THE NAVY TWICE //

This was cool, nice rhyming in some places and i saw a few multies thrown in there too, which is good. But u might wanna add a few more especially at the end of ur rhymes. This seemed like it was kinda done quick also, i kno u can put more into it, cuz ive seen some ur rhymes in the cypher and they were pretty good. But keep it up man, u doing good. Hit me up on 1 of my open mics. Peace.

stfu lumberjack

yeah, this was pretty cool...not really original, but had some decent lines in there

I been a bad boy stompin in a big world
Lift florals in the snow yo.. my shit’s thorough
The kid boroughed, to get deep beneath the surface
Found what he couldn’t reach, than he unearthed it...

that was pretty cool, you have potential to be alot better, just expand on your thoughts, write and present your thoughts thoroughly, and you can be a decent head

keep up

ps, you need 2 links or i close this, ASAP

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