this is old but no one left feed so ima put this shit in open mic....


ok haterz. u will love this one.

this goes to all the bitches who want to keep hatin'.
u keep call like were dating, bitch u talk to god, while i talk to satin.
got lucifer tellin me to get u with a killer flow.
so ima take u out 1 by 1 like im takin bugers out my nose.
catch this flow. cus i know it got u beggin for more.
but u aint gonna get none till i see u walk out the door.
hating on me cus im a freestylen newbie.
bitch shut the fuck up. im new so sue me.
get a lawyer. and meet me in court.
we aint dating bitch so quit talkin bout divorce.
u b callin me 24-7. sayin u hate my rhymes.
i dont give a shit atleast there all mine.
dont got to copy shit, they just come to my mind.
theres no way u can stop me, not with this grind.
that must be ur day job cus all u do is hate.
well u can stop me bitch cus IM GRREEEEAAAT.
when im done rapping ill give u ur mic back.
i already know im better, no opinion, thats a fact.
like the Fcat they b giving or the SAt's
no mother fucker can ever Ace me.
u try and ill rip u to a paper machey,
have 5-0 lock u away keepin u in prision for days.
charges? ill just make some up.
u wont be getting out cus i dont give a fuck.
u bitchs hate so much and i just tend to laugh.
jumping through time got me seeing u a thing of the past.
u cant stop wut u cant see, so how u plan on stoping S to the Z?
coming through like the lil train that could.
ill huff and ill puff blowing u away like ur house made of wood.
makin more raps then i possible should.
why should i stop my life hobbie?
just cus u cant stand me and u cant go by me.
u cant go under and u cant go above.
im ur buggs bunny slaping u with my hand glove.
or like the pink panther, u aint ever gonna catch me.
might be pink, but i still remain S to the Z
running off screen while u going in circles.
have u looking more dorkyer then steve erkle.


lol was just bored so i thought i get this together. lol

S to the Z.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=220823
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=219324

First off, u need to increase ur vocab cuz it was very simple in this piece. Ur flow was ok but u should at some more multies and internal rhyming into it to make it flow and sound better. Also u should come up with better punches and metaphors creating a more advanced sound to ur lyrics. I'll get at some more or ur om's when i can lata aight peace.

Mad Elavation Needed.

right thankz again, and check out some other open mics. this is old =)

You can tell this is old with the vocab used. Expand.

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will ur structure was a lil off and ur vocab was a lil basic and it really dont have the best flow but fuck the hatin this shit is the fuckin shit i wanna see...keep tellin these muthafuckas that u cant be fucked with come as hard as u can and rip the fuckin shit outta that mic and drain the MUTHAFUCKIN PISS outta that pen get these muthafuckas wantin ta not want ta open they fuckin mouths...im defintly feelin ur attitude keep that shit up but yet again im in a mood where i wanna fuck up anyone that opens they mouth wit that normal trash talkin bullshit that escapes there traps but based pretty much just on the attitude of this song the msot i can give ya is a 6.5 and thats mostly just cuz its the shit i wanna read right now but yo try ur best and go full on wit the devil keep releasin ur demons wit harder force and rip these muthafuckas...come at it wit a lil more elevation next time and try ur best ta say the shit u really mean and u'll get by just fine in this game