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03-09-06, 08:13 PM | #1 | |||||||
its WU muthafucka
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Charlie Brown (FREESTYLE)<sick
IP: 0E2B F4BC
I breaks It down like a bone fracture
this terroristic hard form to capture i dispose a rhyme, to fucken expose ya mind flowz I'm, I'll leave any hot niggaz froze in time shine like the sun after rain, trash ya game im way pass the plain give ya a tower in eyeful(eiffel)of skill so u can check what i pull i don't buy your shit even if its holy why would i buy bull(bible) boa constricting as i grab hold, like the nile flooded i got mad flow drown in this deep water,u couldnt follow me being a my shadow the speech i speak slaughters,i strike foes and never miss no nigga could better this the cleaverness i be on that philly blaze gets me realy dazed cant catch this over ya head being willy mays create a feet, submarine sinkin i get so deep, i'll whoop yall fucken asses, I never took falls,with this verbal coffin i'll put yall u niggas shoot ya gunz like charlie brown kicken a foot ball
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03-10-06, 08:40 AM | #2 | |||||||
its WU muthafucka
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IP: 0E2B F4BC
uppin THIS FOR FEED BACK ..............................
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03-10-06, 11:08 PM | #3 | ||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8A05 210E
yea duke diz was good but u need 2 line up ya lines 4 tha next time so it'll b all 2getha ...but ur multies & vocab was nice i like it keep elevating fa sho
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03-12-06, 07:42 PM | #4 | ||||
I Chill in Asylums
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IP: 9133 A552
This was good man, not bad at all. Im liking ur vocab and everything. The rhyming was cool too. But like the dude said u should work on ur structure so the reader will be able to flow thru it easier.
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