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04-26-05, 12:47 AM
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The fall and rise of a star(from Z-A then A-Z)
IP: 5285 DC82
The fall of a star
zoning out,unfocused,memory not present,no veiw of yesterday xtremely in-coherent,not willing to make an attempt,his fame starts to waste-away vicious drug habit,as if he has an endliss suppy from his dirty untensil trouble was brought to him,how could he go to an addict,from being a star so suspensfull rarely acknowledging the world outside,once so loud,now afraid and questionable position deterierating,fans memory fading,his view on the situation isnt operational never interested in others views.but hates his own,wishes the world he could murder Leaving his ambitions behind,he trys to better his mental karma justifying his downward spiral of insanity,calamity,its as if the pain is irate hyperventilating,heart stays racing,mind still tracing the path he wants to generate futrure seems to be for told,hes pale,alone,cold and no longer eager disguising himself,when looking in the mirror.he thinks his eyes visons are contagious basically lost ...all faith..all wisdom..he has so much insanity he can no longer attain-this The rise of a star Anger slowly exits his presence,mind no longer Brainless Creativity re-enters his mindstate fresh,his drug habit? he starts to Drain-this Emotions become stable,mind control is present and Favourable Gracfully start a new,a fresh,a resurection..once again to feel Honarable Inclined to become a legend,famous once again..fullfilled fame like fruit so Juicy Krazyness seems to be fading,no longer living life so Loosley Manager back in contact,things start seeming Normal Opportunities arive,his wisdom seem to move as if knowledge is Portable Questioning his previous mindstate, no longer feels irate or needs to Re-set-it Saving his grace is how he feels,as if him and god are Talekentik Unbeleviably talented,showing off his absolute potential and Versitility Wondering why he went into absloute stupidity with the drug X- but will he be... Yesterdays boy or a simply a man who can overcome Zion? So there you have it, the Z-A and the A-Z of the fall and rise of a star. Rhymes are not the best in this peice, but I focused on the use of the alphabet more  |
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04-26-05, 01:13 AM
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leave you rest'n pz's
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IP: 0CC4 EFEF
wow fam, i never seen it done like this,
shit was mad with vocab n a koo concept good way to string everything into the concept alot of subliminal bars..........(if im readin right) but hey lay of the drugs...lol...j/k fam . looks like you thought about this alot, shit was koo. . negative shit would be your flow n structure but large vocab helped put it all together,...........but the fact that you didnt mess up the alphabet proves you werent high while writing..lmfao........
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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04-26-05, 01:20 AM
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IP: 5285 DC82
haha^^
you fucking clown, thanks for the feed yo..... *stands proud cause he wrote the alphabet properly* lol. |
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04-26-05, 03:06 PM
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IP: 5285 DC82
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07-26-05, 02:00 AM
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IP: 5285 DC82
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07-26-05, 07:22 AM
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Middle Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
aw come on what happened to the rhyming this is just effective writing only not even a freestyle just good solid piece of effective writing
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07-26-05, 03:19 PM
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Witness, 4 God, 4-Ever
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IP: D96A B108
this was good, liked the topic, flow was good, vocab was good also, liked this something different, keep it up man
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 i come from a time when you earned respect, for your rhyme and the way you made words connect, not the money that you made or the girls you sexed, a concept you obviously haven't heard of yet Mars Ill
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07-26-05, 04:53 PM
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The Competition
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07-27-05, 03:36 AM
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IP: 5285 DC82
*slaps BC*
thanks fool upping this old ass open mic that i dont really give two fucks abotu anymore. |
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03-09-06, 06:47 PM
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IP: 5285 DC82
wow, wtf was I smoking to come up with this?
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03-14-06, 02:10 AM
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IP: 6EB9 28C9
I thought this was cool as hell.
The alphabet idea is original, but when I first came into this thread I thought a lot of the shit was going to be forced (as I've found some of your other stuff to be in the past), but this shit just came out nice. It flowed together nicely and I liked it. Good idea, original execution. Dope open mic. |
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