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05-09-06, 06:20 PM | #1 | |||||
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Me Against The World (Freeverse) LEAVE LINKS!!!!!
IP: 2372 BC06
Me Against The World (Freeverse)
Song link: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pag...m?bandID=525342 Another edition to the mixtape, went with that real talk shit. just enjoy it, all I ask. Page link(s): http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2739532 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2739530
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05-09-06, 07:22 PM | #2 | ||||
O.wning Y.ou D.aily
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IP: 93D1 7B98
I gotta say that your quality is pretty good. Some pointers I would like to make though.....you seem to have a monotonous delivery in this one. And it's kinda mechanical too.....like, choppy. You could pull that delivery off if you were more fluid in your flow......just let the words all connect to each other....lag off beat just a slight bit, it's ok
Nice shit though ™
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05-15-06, 12:08 AM | #3 | ||||||
Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
Playing.
Beats intro sounded nice. Quality is definitly alot better than what I previously heard from you. Get more emotional/switch up the sound in your voice once in a while, sound exactly the same in the entire thing. makes anything less interesting. Definitly like your quality. |
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05-15-06, 07:43 AM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: A039 6D4C
listening now.....
for the most part, quality sounded decent, could always be better, but it was straight. your flow is good, but the voice inflextions are missing, it's pretty monotone, but you can make that work for you, i believe a few voice overs in the right spot would have made this for a far better listen. i'm not real big on the freeverse steez, cause either your going to atrtract me with a well though out audio or you just going to get one listen out of me and i'll move on. but for what it was....props...pz.
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05-15-06, 12:50 PM | #5 | |||||||
Ya mom massages my nuts
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IP: 3842 F0D2
ah'ight...dawg I know its delayed but I aint forget ya.....beat was good...ya flow is somewhat robotic...choppy...think beat was too slow for you, cuz u aint really rip how ya could of, delivery has gotten better son like how ya using ya voice...ya change ya tone up..not drastically but a good deal, it was still monotone but its getting there, a few dubs an sum flow change ups an you'd be solid...jus ya flow aint ride that smoothe...lyrically solid..u headed in the right direction my dude....keep it up......1
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05-15-06, 08:47 PM | #6 | ||||
Ike
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first thing i noticed is that your delivery and presence has gotten tons better...
i like the beat alot...u usually pick some nice beats... your still kinda robotic with it...not as bad as it used to be...but its still something thats there and u still gotta work on it.... your using your voice a lot better than u used to...good job with that... overall its just the robotic sound and the semi choppy flow u gotta stay workin on....try to not take as many stops in the middle of a line n shit...youll be straight man...your elevating nicely....it wont be long before your putting out some extra nice shit... good listen man
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05-16-06, 06:04 PM | #7 | |||||
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IP: 2372 BC06
thanks for the feedback, uppin
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05-16-06, 06:34 PM | #8 | ||||
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Nice quality. Nice Beat.
THe flow is pretty on point. A little shaky and forced at times. Other than that it's not bad ... Keep it up
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05-16-06, 07:04 PM | #9 | |||
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IP: 2B7A 2084
liked the beat
ur voice is hella deep flow was pretty decent short but listenable 1 |
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05-16-06, 08:20 PM | #10 | |||||||||
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IP: DB27 0922
listening: aint heard nuthin from you in a while...elevation in all honesty has occoured and whoa at mic quality...what mic you using now???
flows still a lil basic dragging words out in some sections but i'm definitely liking this style better than ya previous one...keep droppin
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05-16-06, 08:26 PM | #11 | |||||||||
...Belong...
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05-17-06, 12:05 PM | #12 | |||||||
Nt Your Average
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Wow...your deliverys mad improved,sound much more confident on the mic now....flows gettin better,still lil choppy at times,need to try put more emotion in...lyrics were nice,yes..your qual has mad imrpoved as well,what mic you got?
Well good shit,just try put some more emotion and smooth out your flow,good shit RTF Here Please:http://community.rapverse.com/showt...614#post2744614
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05-17-06, 06:11 PM | #13 | |||||
The Paragraph President
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IP: 2372 BC06
thanks for the feed.
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05-20-06, 08:21 PM | #14 | ||||
Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: B911 45BE
beat is tight
lyrics are cool flow is choppy in places your emotion needs improvement but has gotten better qualityy is dope like your voice has potential to be verrrry sexy lol
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05-21-06, 06:36 AM | #15 | ||||
Champion
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IP: A730 8BE2
Listening...your quality is much better, your voice is still robotic and yo style is robotic but its still decent...ure flow is okay..you need to add more emotion and delivery...there was one line i cud feel the emotion when u fluctuated the way u said something..but most of it was like.."dah dah dah dah" all the same thing = boring and hard to listen too..but if u change the way u talk on sum words itll be interesting...1
can u rtf: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...268#post2747268
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