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Old 06-24-06, 10:48 AM   #1
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Old 06-24-06, 11:06 AM   #2
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ight ima start wit givin u feed bout the beat..the beats str8 nuthin outstandin but it still sumthin i would spit to..

ur flows decent i feel the flow trhrough the whole song its defintly bumpable and it never falls off

ur lyrics are decent as well they average..they aint basic and they aint majorly complex, but a lyrical track aint everything u still got creative wit ur words

delivery is dope i love ur vioce...hell yea u dope...NEVER MESSED UP NEITHER!! lol major improvement from just rehearsin it...and ur quality is str8 there defintly aint nuthin wrong wit ur quality..*thumbs up*

i'd give this a 7.5/10...good job ma
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Old 06-24-06, 11:44 AM   #3
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lol..word i aint messed up and atleast half of my mic is still healthy..


thanx man
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Old 06-24-06, 12:13 PM   #4
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lol... yo... this was pretty gangsta...lol

the flow is what did it for me on this.... not real lyrical... but not overly generic either... quality could use a lil touching up but not much...

maybe boost ya vocals a lil bit

reminded me of the west coast back in the day

keep it up.. ya shyt will only get better.... niceness....

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Old 06-24-06, 04:17 PM   #5
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The beat is straight iono not my typa shit sounds like really old school underground westcoast Bloods and Crips typa feel too it....like Bangin on Wax ya know?

well......Your flow is good..and ur pressense is there ......overall it aint too bad...but it feels like ur missin somthing.....iono what it is about ur quality but it sounds a lil off

this aint too bad tho

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Old 06-24-06, 04:26 PM   #6
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The beat is weird but it has a pretty killer base line. You step in smoothly, your quality really makes your shit sound hard to understand the lyrics. You can flow pretty consistant but you lack emotion, you sound how I did when I first started recording. You need to get hype way more, work on sounding confident or somin. Your lyrics were decent, personally I believe there was way to much cussing in there. But overall this was a decent track.
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Old 06-24-06, 04:36 PM   #7
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beat is ok....if it was done a lil bit better itd be fire....but..i dunno...im a lil unsure about it

flow is pretty good.......

lyrics is ok.....could be upped

vocals are muffled a bit...cant understand a lot of what your saying...they should be raised a lil bit as well...

you really got a nice voice...once you develop a lil more...i think u gonna be dope...its just a matter of time...

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Old 06-24-06, 04:43 PM   #8
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Returning the feed.

Playing... beats ok, intro is ok.

first thing that lacks is emotion, you sound like your tryna keep your voice low, your sound very monotone on this.
upp your emotion.

Ok, flow is on point, bouncing with the beat nicelhy.

main problems emotion.

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Old 06-24-06, 06:07 PM   #9
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beat is eeehhh not bad, quality is so/so, could get fixed, flow is not bad, pretty good, pretty underground, i kinda like this track, the adlibs are cool,beat sounds old school, lyrics are cool, silables are really good at some spots pretty dope, nice track, 7/10
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Old 06-24-06, 08:16 PM   #10
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yeah nice looking...thamx y'all...


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Old 06-27-06, 05:24 AM   #11
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Listenin'..first thing I noticed was that your vocals are a bit low, turn em up 1.2 or 1.3 decibels i think, the next thing I noticed was the flow. Ma you have a real solid flow, now the only thing you gotta work on flow wise is switching it up nah mean. Multis are hot around the 1min 16 mark they was real nice...delivery needs work, right now it seems your a lil scared but that can be worked on...also presence needs work too but thatll come with confidence...but lyrics are decent too, nice track...
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Old 06-27-06, 07:31 AM   #12
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thanx...



still upping this peeps
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Old 06-27-06, 12:59 PM   #13
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aiight listenin...

beat is tight

your flow is coo, emotion is not there a lot. gotta work on there. But flow is going nice. Can tell you dissing someone. like the rhymes. lyrics tight. good multis around 1:20. shit is nice. getting better as goes on. nice shit. overall not bad, everyone has to elevate, but work on your emotion a lil and delivery a bit. other thn that, nice like track 8/10. stay up

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Old 06-27-06, 01:01 PM   #14
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Old 06-28-06, 08:37 AM   #15
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Beats grimey as fuck.

you got a decent voice but not much energy there, you have a good flow too.

nice lyrics packed with multis... decent track man.
up your energy and it would be sick.
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