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IP: 26FC 8E94
quick lines.....off the top.....~1~
lyrically i can be stranged... untamed with the dark flames/ i start to bring pain... to victims who think they hard emces in the game/ my outstanding talent is blessed with the gift... so im far to be lame/ my heart is as cold as arctic oceans with sharp ice rain/ my minds chaotic and insane full of obseen thinking/ obseen enough to have u shivering quickly... keeping your eye lids from blinking/ have u nervous and shaking... like being followed by a murderer on the loose/ ill style so fowl break u down... like bacteria decomposition... its the truth/ im severe and serious... when frequently bring fire to fearsome foes/ so its a delite that i destroy these devils... thinking there fury will bring blows/ tangle with vets u better where the vest if its your life i threat/ it could be your last day on the set... as i stretch your neck... till u life less/ battling on the fields of battle... like crusade warriors against muslim fiends/ u wont win this round nor take my territory... for glory against me u see/ freeing my mind constently when writing these verbally made creations/ in a tight situation i have patience.... while others panic in fustration/ my links- http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=242805 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=242790 Last edited by K-M : 06-17-07 at 09:37 AM. |
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IP: 26FC 8E94
eh im lookin for some feedback....i know its not my best cause i did it off the top quick but i still would like some feed....i give feedback to yall ...please give some to me lol...i wanna know where i can improve....~1~
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IP: 8CD5 B31D
i think it was good for off the top keep up the work...
give me feedback on mine you do somethin to me -wiley d |
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IP: 26FC 8E94
thanks for the feedback .....~1~
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IP: 20CD 5579
I Liked This...The Wordplay Was iight, The Structue Was Kinda Iffy At Times...But Besides That It Was Cool...100
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: DB1C 4B69
I like that it was tight for jus bein off the top flow was nice maybe a lil choppy!
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: DB1C 4B69
This is decent for jus off the top i liked it then it flowed well!
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New to RV
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IP: D657 40A2
it was ok...for being off the top
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