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12-27-06, 11:02 AM | #1 | ||||||
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DEbUt RV tRack!!! -Different Homes Feat. Been Dumb-
IP: 685C 0602
aight, this my first RV track, jus so yall know i read the rules, here are my two links!
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3128514 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3128515 this is off my upcoming mixtape, "Class Dismissed", i got the hook, and 1st and 3rd verses, Been Dumb is in the middle (No Homo) on the second verse. Leave some feed and i'll RTF here is the track link: Different Homes Feat. Been Dumb lo-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getp...id=4793845&q=lo hi-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getp...id=4793845&q=hi or just check out my page http://www.soundclick.com/perpetualemnity and feel free to listen to, and/or download any tracks! Appreciate all feed...peace |
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12-27-06, 03:26 PM | #2 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 685C 0602
UPPIN....for some feed
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12-27-06, 03:54 PM | #3 | ||||
On The Air - COMIN JAN 07
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IP: A644 4EFD
listening now
the statics kinda high in the beginning the quality seems like it might be a little iffy multies were good....you gotta nice laid back underground style...i think that you should add a little more emotion on that first verse......the lyrics had good substance...just a lil more emotion and change up and it would be better hook same thing..would be better if you added more emotion second better emotion.......lyrics are cool......i just dont like the lispy sound on the voice here and there...but its all good.......flow was decent........this aint to shabby either just more emotion and it'd be way better hook again more emotion and it'd be better 3rd verse seems like the dude has more emotion........lyrics again had good substance.....but with more delivery on that it'd be way sicker...good shit though......... overall decent song..i think ya'll should re-record it and add a lil more delivery and emotion and it'd be agood album track 1 |
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12-27-06, 04:29 PM | #4 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 840F F6A2
appreciate the feed, and will defo return the favor, as ive got more tracks to post up still but yeh, definatley appreciate the feed!
Uppin |
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12-27-06, 04:30 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 6BD7 BD9F
this track was aight for meya efforts for it are coo the hook was str8 first flows slips a bit lil offset in spots but no to bad the second verse needs more delivery ya lyrics were str8 but how they were presented just gotta throw that shit in the face of the listenerthird verse was my fav i thought it hit on all cylinders overall an average track with a few fixes a bananaz track u feel me? anywho do you homeboy shits soundin nice overall
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12-28-06, 06:46 AM | #6 | |||||||
I'm Talented.Period.
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IP: F13F 4833
had a spoken word type feel to it
more reading type deal than actual flowing like the sound of the voice/lyrics tho spruce up ya flow man not great, not terrible = OKAY 1 |
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