http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pag...m?bandID=518102

Im working on thismixtape,leave feed thanx

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uppin this shit yall, first song I do with real quality I guess,

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you need 2 links of feedback on other songs or your thread will get closed my dude. And Willa is always on her game...that bitch.

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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238939
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238333
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238853
my bad

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LOL @ u being the 125945958965485685648956348975648th person to use this beat


haa

with that said...

Beat is nice...lol

flow is good enough for this beat...but ur not owning it...and it's a bit unrefined in spots...

not sure wut ur message is...

ur delivery needs work...sounds more like ur reading and not flowing

I see u also had no idea what to do with the hook...lol

But, u did aiight on it...added a lil something


Keep droppin and keep elevatin dawg...I'd like to see u improve

thanx, lol at the whole site using this beat,nah but appriciate the feed cuzz, I'll take that shit home work a lil more thanx
uppin

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aight i'm peepin now

iono the flow was off in more then a few spots....lyrics were okay u need to write um longer so they flow better wit the beat cuz it kinda seems chopped up.....voice is straight....emotion is aight.....and the delivery is ehh

Iono you could have potentail just polish up that flow a lil

i def. am feelin me and limited editions edition better

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ADD ME LETS MAKE SOMETHING

TheMyspace

^^^I was feelin my version better too


LOL




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you know i got my radio show... im playin this on air as i critique.... here


beat is familiar.... you comin with lack luster energy... but its all good... it picks up... almost like you havent mastered the words of the track yet... you read it through a few times... not really polished for delivery at all.... but the hook comes in.... its aight... you got swag its juss a lil wild... haha... i can most defff see the potential... lil like Pac on the 2nd verse... for like 4 bars then it got a lil sloppy again... but the story is followed.

pretty solid joint... you deff got some serious potential ...

7./10


keep at it mayne


ps.... if you got any more audio you want aired out on the Radio show Live every Sunday night @ 7pm-9pmEST... send your tracks to : tito4bro2nsky0@hotmail.com


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Full Metal Bronsky Dropin 1st Quarter 08'

^^Yea...I agree with you on the potential thing...daz why I was sayin I'd like to seehim really elevate

he gotta jus keep droppin and adapting his flow/style...polish it


and don't be afraid to be called wack on the journey



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Thanx yall, really getting some knoledge right now, word i was reading of a piece of paper LOL next time I'll just keep the rhymes in my head and deliver the words like if i was really talking to yall, uppin thanx

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^^Brotha...I read off a piece of paper too

But, I pretty much have it memorized by the time I record because I spit my verse over and over while writing it TO THE BEAT...

So, I'll write 2 bars, go back and spit it

Write two more...go back and spit those 4

Write two more...go back and spit those 6

So on and so forth

So, but the time I record, I will have practiced my verse around 50 times.




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dang...givin out all my secrets!









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You sound scared of the mic, kinda makes me feel like you've never recorded before. With time comes skill, so keep on keepin on, not much I can say that hasn't been said, just I listened.