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this shit crazy..

first verse - I wrap the verse arond words starting with the letter P and the second verse the same thing with the letter R..

this shit is cccrazy...

dolla back..ima drop links under here

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alphabetical slaughter x2, papoose but with flow lol. was hopin for a hook but w/e. beat is sick btw. "playin pictionary" heh 'check up on that prostate' ok nice to see the vocab here cuz this shit def aint easy. i tried it before, notice i never posted it up on myspace or sc lol how'd i know that rick james line was gonna come. delivery, presence, quality, all that u already know was on point. good shit

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lolol thanks fammo

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i like this beat...real cool..

first verse comes in...cool flow..basic but fits the beat..prescence on this is cool....lyrics nothing special..

no hook? boo

second verse comes in..i like this one a lot more than the "p" verse..flow on this one is a lil better...again nothing too special lyrically..



this kinda reminded me of that saigon track..where he just does the "P"..good track.

okay hook needed...somethin simple like

P (wit dubs) :: pause:: R (dubbed again)
^ that x3
and the fourth line somethin like
"Prah'ject bitch im up up out cha radar"

cuz then even the hook line starts with p ends with r, then you go from the p verse to the r verse....you can get more creative with that last line, but with your hype n all that hook would be bananas....n keep the talking and send it down 3db';s then you got a crack song, right now its just some crack foundation....finish it off boy......do what you do tho, good shit

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Thanks yeah same beat

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I'm def feelin this track prah, you musta been doin some spittin while you was behind bars lol, you have even a better swagger dude. I don't it's the way you sayin some of the words, ya delivery possibly is a bit changed in which im def feelin. The beat is deadly the rock feel word I'm feelin it a lot. just wish the track was a bit longer haha...nice drop P To Tha R!

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shit was cool man, keep at it

thanks up this shit

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lol......word man. I'm feeling this shit. Its easier to catch the first verse's Ps cause they're a hard letter. The second verse's Rs was a little harder to hear the dopeness of it. It was nice though....all the way through nice


And yeah, I gotta holla at you man, cause I got a track to send you to jump on. I started it and it sounds like some mixtape shit that I think you'd murder man

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ight man, listening

liked the concept. thought maybe the set-up at the intro where you explain what you were gonna do was almost like giving away the secret, or maybe spoke too much about it. gotta leave a little something on the table to keep that curiosity and anticipation in there. the beat choice, i like the beat, but being that someone already spit on this beat for a letter track like this, it makes yours sound lke a copy. a diff beat woulda made it sound like a more original concept. the P's are nice, came in with high energy but i wish there was more words with P in there. started off heavy but thinned out as the verse went on like you ran out of steam as the verse went on. there's a lot, but it's not like every word, or every other word, its like a few per sentence where possibe. the R's yeah shoulda had even more R's in there, there was less than there was the P's. R's a heavy letter to hear emphasis on so you really coulda kicked it up evtra hard on the annunciation so people pick it up without searching for it. The rhymes in both verses was hot i just wish there was more of what your focus was. the ender on the second verse was a nice way to go out

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Aight......feeelin the beat....hahah word to what paranoi said bout behind bars you cameback harder than ever here........Nice concept tho feelin the idea......yeah this was crazy hahahah deffff a hott one from you.....you musta done some serious thinkin for this....unless it just came naturally.......overall really nice track......keep up man.....1

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