check 12-16

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checkin in, good luck man...

i did 18 lines man, my bad...

It aint forgotten that what you did was rotten,
You wasn’t trying to free slaves…
…you was trying to steal our profit from cotton,
You was plotting from day one with that shit,
Abe wasn’t morally just…
…he was just on an ego trip, that racist bitch,
The Union was just as racist as the Confederation,
But the north used propaganda…
…like the lies from the Emancipation Proclamation,
Just cause you the president you think you can us give orders,
We succeeded in succession…
…now we ‘ll teach the north a lesson if they cross the border,
If we had more than 3/5’s of an army to fight,
The south would’ve easily won…
…and history would be forced to rewrite,
But we did lose the battle but we definitely won the war, ok?
Not matter what lies you say…
…the confederation died, but slavery still exists in America today…

good luck trey....peace...

ya'll pussy, an on one was ever with these fag's
now a days i dare you to walk throught harlem with the confederate flag
we are about equal shit, it pumps throught our veins
if ya'll so hard,
..put the pistols down an fight the slaves without chains
we won this shit, an these pussy's got there team drop
so if the south's ever making a come back...it's mostly in hip hop
its a free country, blacks can go in shops without stares
but ya'll do rule some parts of the south in area's no one really cares
ya'll lost, good ol Ab Lincoln was a legend an i'll qoute'em best
four score and seven years ago our fathers..and im sure you know the rest
no one'll stand for this, no more getting beating an teeth chipped
so if they say history repeats itself...i'm sure this part would be skipped

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It aint forgotten that what you did was rotten,
You wasn’t trying to free slaves…
…you was trying to steal our profit from cotton,
damn...hrash but nice opener that stuck to your side...9/10
You was plotting from day one with that shit,
Abe wasn’t morally just…
…he was just on an ego trip, that racist bitch,
agn, good and brutal but not as effective int he middle of the verse...7/10
The Union was just as racist as the Confederation,
But the north used propaganda…
…like the lies from the Emancipation Proclamation,
kinda swayed sayed sides but made up for it w/second line...8/10
Just cause you the president you think you can us give orders,
We succeeded in succession…
…now we ‘ll teach the north a lesson if they cross the border,
ehh....6.5/10
If we had more than 3/5’s of an army to fight,
The south would’ve easily won…
…and history would be forced to rewrite,
............7/10
But we did lose the battle but we definitely won the war, ok?
Not matter what lies you say…
…the confederation died, but slavery still exists in America today…
great closer...............10/10
47.5/60................................79%

ya'll pussy, an on one was ever with these fag's
now a days i dare you to walk throught harlem with the confederate flag
not a great opener............5.5/10
we are about equal shit, it pumps throught our veins
if ya'll so hard,
..put the pistols down an fight the slaves without chains
liked the flow alot..................7.5/10
we won this shit, an these pussy's got there team drop
so if the south's ever making a come back...it's mostly in hip hop
digressing........................5/10
its a free country, blacks can go in shops without stares
but ya'll do rule some parts of the south in area's no one really cares
swaying sides and digressing....5.5/10
ya'll lost, good ol Ab Lincoln was a legend an i'll qoute'em best
four score and seven years ago our fathers..and im sure you know the rest
eehhh no punch, flow or anything.......3.5/10
no one'll stand for this, no more getting beating an teeth chipped
so if they say history repeats itself...i'm sure this part would be skipped
7/10
?????=less than the opponent

v/i.e.

thanks for the vote...any more votes ppl??

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3150423

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3150429

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3150532

^^my three votes so far, if more people posted their verses, i would have had all four votes already...

It aint forgotten that what you did was rotten,
You wasn’t trying to free slaves…
…you was trying to steal our profit from cotton,
But we did lose the battle but we definitely won the war, ok?
Not matter what lies you say…
…the confederation died, but slavery still exists in America today…

vs.

we won this shit, an these pussy's got there team drop
so if the south's ever making a come back...it's mostly in hip hop

Close battle here, really coulda went either way. Both of you did good in studyin' up on the war and came with the personals, but felt both of you needed more wit to your verses. Both of you had tons of statements which hit, but woulda hit so much harder if only wordplay or some wit was combined with them. I got IE with one more quotable and consistency wise it was pretty much dead even so I got IE here.

Vote - IE