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02-07-07, 09:57 PM | #1 | |||||
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A Thug's Prayer
IP: F1E5 C4C0
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Dear god forgive us for we have sinned forgive us for the trouble we have been in. Pain flows through the back of our head as we lay down to rest in bed. A gangsters life is no where for us cause all we are is wannabe. Being with the homies is alot of fun but when left in another hood the only thing to do is run. God gave us the strength to live the day so dat 5 bullets wont leave us on the ground to lay. God we know our parents love us with all there hearts but when we go and do sin all it does is tear us apart we fear for our life when we go at night wherther or not we will survive the next gang fight. A gangsters life is no where for us cause all we are is wannabe. When we walk the streets we ack n' mack but now a days we have to learn to watch our back. As we leave the house we wave good-bye then we see a tear run from our mothers eyes. We want to stay home but we really dont try but when were out on the streets we wonder if will survive the next drive by,when we listen to tupac we remind our selfs of the homies we've lost. As we close our prayer and let you in so you may forgive us your heavenly father for we have sinned. A gangsters life is no where for us cause all we are is wannabe. ~Amen~ Sorry for the crappy writing, in a rush. http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3141856 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3141858
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02-08-07, 10:46 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 0528 BE3A
it was aight..very basic rhymes...basic vocabulary..pretty much a basic peice...sorta boring boring in all honesty...topics been played...but all ya need is to keep writing, u getting the idea so just keep going man
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02-08-07, 03:35 PM | #3 | |||||
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IP: 3230 6096
I appreciate the honesty man, thnx.
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02-10-07, 06:30 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: A1B5 6324
it was alright.. i was feeling it.. but most of the things you were saying i wrote about before ..
too similiar 4real...........................................fa ll back................fall way back |
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02-26-07, 11:45 PM | #5 | ||||
-da prophit-
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IP: CF86 0039
ive seen this on another site before.. buts it was called gangsters prayer. not thugs prayer. ill look into that... and PS. im gettin back in to the game... so be expecting some good shit peeps
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03-08-07, 11:58 PM | #6 | |||||||
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I DIDN'T KNOW IF I WAS IN BIBLE STUDY, OUR WHAT BUT I LIKE EVERY POST JUST BECAUSE APRESON HAS THE HEART TO DO IT................................................ ............................... http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=239875
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03-09-07, 07:30 PM | #7 | ||||
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yeah. topic = been done before. i woulda liked to see somethin like another approach at it tho ya dig? like...if you woulda been askin god to take u outta tha shit you in at tha time. but as far as what i read, tha flow lacked in some spots. like tha ryhmes were a lil jumbled. but besides that and tha played subject, i was into it for tha mos part
...sniff sniff
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03-12-07, 12:41 AM | #8 | |||||
don't try.
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IP: 7BE2 A0A1
yeaaa.seen the subject before and all the different ways people have used it.. but this was pretty descent and i was feelin whawt you was saying..you were jumblin stuff in..n' it was kind of lackin...jus keep elevatin
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03-15-07, 04:34 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 3E9E 35FE
Simple But It Was Effective In Places... You Need To Think About Takin The Skills Of Rap And Findin Somethin That Suits You Like Wordplay Or Multiz Or Punches And All That Other Shit And See What U Excel In After Awhile Then Focus On It
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